Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important aspect of a job is the money a person earns. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Work is an important aspect of our lives and it can affect it greatly since work can provide us financially and also give a chance to have a goal for our life. Nowadays some people may hold the opinion that joy is the most important aspect of a job. But to be frank, I cannot agree with them. I strongly believe that money that people earn is the most important aspect for the following reasons.
First of all, money motivates people to work better and harder. Money is the result of people's work which can see it easily. It causes that people are motivated and therefore is very important. For example, my brother, who is 4 years smaller than me, works for a big company in my country. Each month, after he is paid, he buys new things for himself such as clothes, shoes and so on. He is very happy of that and works harder next month to get more money and buy more things. As you can see, money pushes him to work better.
Secondly, money provides our family to have safer life financially. Everybody who is responsible for his/her family's financial situation thinks of money n the first priority. Money is the most important thing which ensures that we can provide our family a better life. For instance, I remember my father quieted his first job when I was 6 years old. The reason that he changed his job was that I needed to go to school and we required money for that. Therefore, my father searched for a better financially job to support me.
In contrast, joy is one of the other important factors when you seeking for a job. If you don't love your job even it is a high paid job, probably you cannot progress in your job or your quality degrades significantly. My sister worked as a teacher for 4 years but she didn't like it at all since she thought that it was boring. So she quitted the job and worked as a nurse in a hospital. Just after 3 years, she was a candidate for a higher position. The trick of her success was the love that she gets because she thought she was useful for their people.
In conclusion, although there are other factors such as joy or the place where you want to work which are important to some extent, but I strongly believe that money is the most important aspect of a job. Not only will it motivate people, but also it provides us financially for a better life. Therefore, I think that people should think about the money that they can earn when looking for a job.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1967.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 450.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.37111111111 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33412579136 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468888888889 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 609.3 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.8430287019 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.6538461538 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3076923077 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.80769230769 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203238421923 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0650675536179 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615706018617 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128936708377 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0502573138022 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 11.7677419355 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.77 10.9000537634 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.94 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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