Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important things people
learn are from families.
In today's convoluted and competitive world, it becomes a highly charged and hot debate topic whether the most significant things can be learned from family or not. Some people are the leading the claim of that, in today's hectic and complicated life, people learn the most important things from out of the family. However, others may take an opposite point of view and believe that people are strongly depended on their family in order to learn important things. If I have to face these two choices, I tend to choose a latter point. There are some important reasons, the most outstanding of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin with, most of the people's time is spent in their home in tandem with their family. As a matter of fact, they are readily influenced by their parents and other family members. Needless to say that there is a large number of people pursuing their parent’s way in their lives. Hence, since they are really close to their family, they personality and characteristics will be formed based on their parents' advice and method. Let me give you an example might make this viewpoint more evident. Without any doubt, being independent is one the most important things in one life. When I was chilled, I was allowed to do households chores in order to take responsibility for something, which enabled me to experience the independent lifestyle. Then, after many years of my childhood, now I was accepted to a university that was far from to our city. For this reason, by accumulating a great deal of experience, I did not have any difficulty in my life at university owing to being autonomous. As a result, the important characteristics are learned from family.
Apart from forming the personality, the second debatable point is that on the one hand, some people believe that nowadays, due to the progression of technology, there are a host of available sources on the internet teaching people indispensable things and lessons. On the other hand, some other people believe that people cannot trust in the internet and others sources like it in order to learn significant things because people's needs must be considered in a right way based on great sources like family. I take the former viewpoint with a pinch of salt and claim that the latter viewpoint is much closer to the reality, for I do believe that the more people count on their family, the more people learn important things effectively because they family are really compassionate and they always want the best things for them. By way of illustration, there is a well-known proverb in Persian the equivalent of it in English sounds, be with your family and ensure your future family. It means, since parent are trustable, people can learn from the important things
To wrap it up. by considering all aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that people can learn the important things from their family, inasmuch as in the first place their personality will be formed in their family because they spend most of their time in their family, and in the second place since their family members are more trustable, they are taught effectively compared to other external sources.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... members. Needless to say that there is a large number of people pursuing their parent's way...
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Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'hosts'?
Suggestion: hosts
... progression of technology, there are a host of available sources on the internet te...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a right way" with adverb for "right"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ecause peoples needs must be considered in a right way based on great sources like family. I t...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ople can learn from the important things To wrap it up. by considering all aforem...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, may, really, second, so, then, well, apart from, as a matter of fact, as a result, to begin with, in the first place, in the second place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 84.0 52.1666666667 161% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2651.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 540.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90925925926 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82057051367 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70584073332 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.438888888889 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 836.1 618.680645161 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.381006127 48.9658058833 172% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.238095238 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7142857143 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.71428571429 5.45110844103 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163568257974 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0617546219931 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514900402263 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114391501955 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0310899226834 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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