Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their older (15 to 18 year-old) teenage children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
It is a controversial issue and many psychologists did important researches about it. Considering my own situation right now, I prefer that parents and others make their teenagers important decisions for several reasons; they are experienced, aware about their children’s talents. In addition, teenagers unable to make right decisions for their life’s critical issues.
First, parent and others, I mean advisors, are more experienced than teenagers. This help them to make right decisions at the right time. They were teenager and passed it with precious experiences. For example, my cousin did not eager to apply for computer engineering several years ago. His parents insisted on this major and finally, he applied for it. Now he a senior engineer in a leading software company. He always talks about his parent’s role in his success.
Second, our parents are aware about our talents and skills. It helps them to make a strategic plan for their teenager’s future with regarding their talents and interests. They know that talent and passionate to do a task is a fundamental factor to reach desired goals. For instance, one of my relatives was fired from school because teachers believe that she could not concentrate on her courses. As their parents knew that she was interested in dancing and dancers have higher incomes, they registered her in a dance class. Now, she is a famous dancer and she is a sort of celebrity and their parents are proud of her. Thus, parent’s decision can be the best at the time.
Finally, teenagers are not able to decide right decisions. Their brain is not developed enough to analyze factors and situations appropriately. Most of their decisions are depended on emotional rather than cognitional. Also, they are more passionate to follow friends, then, this indicates that they are not aware about consequences of their decisions. My uncle is a policeman. He hates this job. When I ask him “why did you choose this job?” he respond me that it was his friend’s decision, not him. In fact, he just tried to be part the group by registering in police department. So, as most of teenager’s decisions are based on their sentiments, they mostly regretful in the future.
In conclusion, I believe that parents are more qualified to make their decisions because they are more experienced because they pass this period of time several years ago, and their experiences let them to have a plan for their teenagers. As the result, if you want your teenagers will be prosperous, do not let them to decide their important decisions solely.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 457, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'responds'.
Suggestion: responds
...s;why did you choose this job?' he respond me that it was his friend's decisi...
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Line 8, column 139, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...more experienced because they pass this period of time several years ago, and their experience...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, regarding, second, so, then, thus, for example, for instance, i mean, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => OK
Pronoun: 80.0 43.0788530466 186% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2189.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11448598131 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93721513134 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509345794393 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 677.7 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 24.0 9.59856630824 250% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8797646694 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.1785714286 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2857142857 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231607788794 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0628853366277 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055828640913 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151000405594 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0511507478028 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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