Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Since the dawn of civilization, parents have had one of the greatest role in people's lives from all around the world, for they have had one of the most prominent influence on changes in their lives. Some people are inclined toward the opinion that nowadays, young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives compared to the past whereas others hold exactly the opposite perspective. From my vantage point, it is crystal clear that today's young people can make decisions about their life considerably better since not only can they use the internet for their decisions, but also they read a greater number of books compared to the past as well. The following paragraphs will aptly elucidate my perspective.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that so influential has the internet been that it has had abundant positive effects in people's lives, yet above all it has helped people from all around the world solve their problems, and consequently, they are able to make the best decision about their own life by themselves. An example will illustrate this view point much better. Highly interested in using the internet, my friend had to make a decision about his career life, and subsequently, he tried to figure out the details about some types of jobs, in which he was interested, by means of the internet. Thereby, he is working as a programmer in a company since then, for by searching the internet, he could comprehend that he really loves programming. I firmly believe that had he asked his parents for choosing his career, he could not have chosen this remarkable decision, and therefore, most of today's young people are better able to make decisions about their life by their own.
Furthermore, it is established beyond doubt that on the one hand some people believe that in the past, young people were better able to make decisions about their own life since they were not dependent to their parents as much as now, yet on the other hand some people believe that today's young people are better able to make decisions by their own due to the fact that they are more knowledgeable and know things much better. I firmly agree with the latter view point, for I believe that the more people become knowledgeable, the more they can choose the best decisions in their lives. By way of illustration, a recent empirical study conducted by University of California Los Angeles, which catch you off guard, reveals that nowadays, a high percentage of people, most of whom are among the youth, choose the decisions about their life by their own since they are adept enough to choose the best decision.
To wrap it up, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that nowadays, young people make decisions related to their own lives better by their own compared to the past inasmuch as in the first place, they can use the internet to choose the best decision, and in the second place, they are more knowledgeable by virtue of reading a great number of books. The most I can hope for, and it is not a small hope, is that in the not too distant future people will make the best decisions ever in their lives, for whereby, they can help their society improve, and as a proverb says "the biggest room in the world, is the room for improvement" I firmly believe that it is prominent for us to help our society's breakthrough.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...his remarkable decision, and therefore, most of todays young people are better able to make de...
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...ecisions about their life by their own. Furthermore, it is established beyond do...
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...us to help our societys breakthrough.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, really, second, so, then, therefore, well, whereas, in the first place, in the second place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 87.0 52.1666666667 167% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2794.0 1977.66487455 141% => OK
No of words: 586.0 407.700716846 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76791808874 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92010537223 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59943042244 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.407849829352 0.524837075471 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 871.2 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 41.0 20.1344086022 204% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 109.586514141 48.9658058833 224% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 199.571428571 100.406767564 199% => OK
Words per sentence: 41.8571428571 20.6045352989 203% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 11.3571428571 5.45110844103 208% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.504402293084 0.236089414692 214% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.197285006513 0.076458572812 258% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13556308472 0.0737576698707 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.354791074659 0.150856017488 235% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0720900870337 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.0 11.7677419355 187% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.32 58.1214874552 66% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.1 10.1575268817 178% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.27 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.002688172 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.4 10.0537634409 183% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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