Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: People can
solve important problems by themselves or with the help from their family
members so there’s no need for the government to help them.
In today's convoluted and competitive world, it becomes a highly charged and hot debatable topic whether people are able to some their important problems by themselves or they can be solved by helping of government. Therefore, some people are the leading proponent of the claim that people are able to solve problems by themselves and with the help of their family members. However, others may take an opposite point of view and believe that their problems cannot be resolved by assisting of the government. If I have to face these two choices, I tend to choose the latter idea. In what follows, I will pinpoint the irrefutable reasons.
To begin with, these days, job opportunity is on the most important problems which cannot be solved without helping of governments. To elaborate on, nowadays, owing the rapid growth of population, finding a vacant position is really challenging and sometimes is impossible. Hence, this problem will be eliminated or at least mitigated sharply if governments invest a great deal of money in expanding on the current factories or businesses or even establishing new businesses. Imagine that how can people solve this problem individually or with the help of their family members? Let me give you an example which might this viewpoint much more evident. My cousin is living in Turkey that their government solves the job hunting problems by giving a hoard of money to graduate students as a loan to start their business. Consequently, they are able to start a business and expand them by hiring new workers. For this reason, this approach by helping the government can omit job problems easily.
Apart from investing money in new and present businesses, the second debatable point is that some people believe that people are able to pay their tuition in order to pursue their study for a higher degree of education. However, others believe that parents cannot afford to pay their children's tuition due to the lack of money, but the government is able to support competent students by offering them some full fellowship and scholarship. I take the former viewpoint with a pinch of salt and claim that the latter viewpoint is much closer to the reality, for I do believe that the more government help student in their education by paying their cost of education, the more they will study without any kinds of mental problems. By way of illustration a recent empirical study conducted by the University of Tehran, which catch you off guard, reveals that a high percentage of students who have received a scholarship from their government is able to become successful in their lives and education because they do not bear the weight of tuition on their shoulder. As a result, education as one of the most important problems of people can be solved by governments without bringing stress on people's mind.
To wrap it up, by considering all aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes the positive importance of government' assistance in order to solve significant problems inasmuch as in the first place, governments is able to remove or even reduce the job hunting problems that people cannot solve them by themselves, and in the second place, they can support them financially in their education because people are not potent enough to pay their tuition by themselves.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, may, really, second, so, therefore, apart from, at least, as a result, to begin with, in the first place, in the second place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 88.0 52.1666666667 169% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.0752688172 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2760.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 550.0 407.700716846 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01818181818 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84273464058 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76797745178 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 855.9 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 99.7154955631 48.9658058833 204% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 145.263157895 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9473684211 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.45110844103 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300721090449 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10051749647 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0741506958951 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198424603507 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0307130372472 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.43 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 86.8835125448 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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