Do you agree or disagree with the following statement People should keep trying to reach their goals even if they seem impossible to achieve Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? “People should keep trying to reach their goals, even if they seem impossible to achieve.” Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.

Some people state that it is crucial to keep on trying to accomplish their goals even when it may seem impossible to get at them. However, others think otherwise. The latter says that if you cannot reach your goal, then forget it, you will not be able to achieve them and it is a waste of time keep trying doing that. In my opinion, it is primal to persevere our dreams even when it seems impractical to do it. I feel this way as I will talk over in this article.
First of all, it is extremely important to seek our goals because without them we may fail in life. For example, Hittler's dream was to get the dominance of the world by having many followers and implementing his dictatorship around Germany. He pushed hardly enough his army on England by releasing rocket over it and he was succeeding in doing it until he realized that his army was dying faster. Unfortunately, he did not accomplish his goal and ended up killing himself. Therefore, this example elucidates the desideratum of keep trying hard to accomplish ones goals.
Moreover, it is crucial not to fall after the first attempt going down because this way we may never be able to stand up again and restart once again. For instance, one of my friends has lost the job and had his marriage ending in divorce. But, after a period of rehabilitation, he turned over and was able to start again and succeeded in life by graduating from his master and P.h.d. program. Thus, this instance clarifies the necessity of persevering in our goals.
Finally, I strongly believe that it is very important to keep trying on our goals because this way we will not end up dead and, also, we will be able to stand up and succeed in life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 244, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'hardly' is usually put before the verb 'pushed'.
Suggestion: hardly pushed
...ing his dictatorship around Germany. He pushed hardly enough his army on England by releasing...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 558, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ratum of keep trying hard to accomplish ones goals. Moreover, it is crucial not to ...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, as to, for example, for instance, i feel, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1382.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 308.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.48701298701 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51403548717 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555194805195 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4836700654 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.1333333333 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5333333333 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0666666667 5.45110844103 185% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160005612249 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0543394033502 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765811946018 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0998049164257 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103464995184 0.0645574589148 160% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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