Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People who have learned many different skills are more likely to succeed than those who focus on learning only one skill.
In today’s convoluted world, it becomes a highly charged and widely raised topic whether people who have learn a diverse array of skills are more possible to succeed than others who focus deeply on learning one skill or not. Therefore, some people are the leading proponents of the claim that people should concentrate on only on skill to be prosperous. However, some others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that individuals should be taught several skills to be able to reach the pinnacle of success. From my vantage point, the second belief is more persuasive. In what follows, I will pinpoint the most outstanding and irrefutable reasons.
To commence, one of the compelling reason lending credence to stance taken above is that by learning several skills people can enhance their job opportunities. To elaborate on, in such a hectic world where unemployment has been increased dramatically and most company managers and employers are willing to employ people who are informed and equipped with several skills, people should expend their constant and considerable effort to become familiar with multifarious skills to improve their job vacancies. To shed light on this matter I want to mention an example. Last week, my intimate friend and I had an interview at one of the most prestigious companies. Then, the interviewer asked several different questions related to different areas to evaluate our knowledge, information and skills. As my friend has been taught several skills, he could express his skills successfully and convinced the employer that he is merited to occupy that position. Hence, he grasped that well-paid job.
Another equally important point that justifies my assertion is that in such a convoluted world it is quite possible that we face several difficulties which are formidable obstacle in the way of success. Hence, people who learn several skills can easily find a rational way to come with those difficulties since they are informed and experienced person. That is they are not required to try different way to solve their problems. To elaborate on, their skills help them to find a logical way in a short time. Conversely, people who focus on one skill will be needed to occult with experience people to find a way to address their problems. Then, they will waste a lot of time and energy. Accordingly, as experience people can easily remove the problems in the way of success, they can be more successful people.
To wrap it up, taking into account of all the factors that I illustrated above, it can be concluded that people should learn different skills to be successful. To recapitulate the reason, people who are familiar with different skills can find well-paid jobs. Hence, they can earn much money to meet their financial needs and be able to buy their different requirements. Besides, those people can easily find a way to handle their embarrassing situations. Then, if they face some difficulties, they will not be overwhelmed by stressed since they are sure that they are capable of handling different tough problems.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 111, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'learned', 'learnt'.
Suggestion: learned; learnt
...ly raised topic whether people who have learn a diverse array of skills are more poss...
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Line 2, column 507, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... skills to improve their job vacancies. To shed light on this matter I want to men...
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Line 2, column 689, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'several'.
Suggestion: several
... companies. Then, the interviewer asked several different questions related to different areas to...
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Line 3, column 358, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[10]
Message: The pronoun is must be used with 'are'.
Suggestion: are
...e informed and experienced person. That is they are not required to try different ...
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Line 3, column 459, Rule ID: HELP_TO_FIND[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help them find' instead.
Suggestion: help them find
...problems. To elaborate on, their skills help them to find a logical way in a short time. Converse...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, besides, conversely, hence, however, if, may, second, so, then, therefore, well, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2575.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 505.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09900990099 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74048574033 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7891256058 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491089108911 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 794.7 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.0208300463 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.291666667 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0416666667 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.125 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293059386091 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0851369985446 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0981365050104 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199173879735 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0636418257255 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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