Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People would be happier with
fewer possessions.
In today's convoluted and competitive world, it becomes a highly charged and hot debatable topic whether people would be happier by having more possessions or not. Therefore, some people are the leading proponent of the claim that more possessions will bring them more difficulties resulting in sadness. However, others may take an opposite point of view and believe that being happy is in direct proportion to have more possessions. If I have to face these two choices, I tend to choose the latter idea. There are some significant reasons, the most outstanding of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin with, people are able to experience a convenient and better life with having more things belonging to them. To elaborate on, nowadays, due to our hectic and complex life, people have plenty of problems notably monetary issues. Hence, their possessions enable them to have a comfortable life because they can sell some part of their belongings when they face problems. In contrast, people who do not have these possessions have to have an arduous life which their happiness will be deprived. Let me give you an example might make this viewpoint much more evident. When I was a master student, I have decided to pursue my study at a university abroad, then, owing to lack of money, I could not apply. Then, when my father understood my situation, he told me that I sell one of my farmland and support you, hence, it made me happy. For this reason, had we not had any possessions, I would not have pursued my study.
Apart from having convenient life, the second debatable point is that on the one hand, some people believe that by having more possessions, people will have a lot of problems to maintain them, which bring them stress and tension. On the other hand, some others believe that, by having more belongings, they are allowed to become more confident, and eventually their self-satisfaction will be increased. I take the former viewpoint with a pinch of salt and claim that the latter viewpoint is much closer to the reality. To elucidate on, people having more possessions can donate some of them to charity and people needing them, and therefore, their self-confidence will be boosted. In addition, the fame earned by this decision enable them to be happier. As a result, by having more possessions, they are permitted to have positive contribution to their society especially poor people, which owing to being satisfied, they will be happy.
To wrap it up, by considering all aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes the positive importance of more possessions inasmuch as in the first place, they have a better life by having more of them, as in the second place, their possessions allows them to help others which bring them more confidence.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, may, second, so, then, therefore, apart from, in addition, in contrast, as a result, to begin with, in the first place, in the second place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2321.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93829787234 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76415735205 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476595744681 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 729.0 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0816743454 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.05 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 5.45110844103 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140297089761 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0561520859565 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0418817451506 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0922845196545 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0537351588359 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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