Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students, not teachers or administrators should be in control of their own education.
In the last couple of years, the school systems all around the world were criticized that students were not sufficiently prepared for today’s complex world. This led to the discussion whether students should have the possibility to schedule their own education. In my opinion, school administrations and teachers should have the power to decide about the education of the students. I feel this way for two reason, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, most of students have not the foresight to decide which subjects will fit the needs of our fast-paced world. Today’s world is changing rapidly into a highly complex world, where subjects, such as mathematics, physics and informatics, will be necessary to understand it. However, if students could choose their own education, many of them would avoid these complex subjects. For instance, during my high school period, one of my friends hate the subject mathematics. If he had the possibility to drop this subject, he would immediately have done that. However, he is currently working as an apprentice at the “Deutsche Bank”. If he had dropped such an important subject during his high school time, he would have lacked now the basic laws of mathematics to work in the finance sector. For this reason, students should not be in control of their own education.
Secondly, teachers and administrators have the most experience. They went through a comprehensive training to learn theories of education and thus they know best how to educate students. As professionals in their field, they are also more capable of picking the right subjects to prepare the students for their future. My own experience is a compelling example for this. In my sixth grade, I had the possibility to choose between a scientifically orientated track and a more language orientated track. At first, I was almost ready to choose the language orientated track, since my best friends chose this track. But my mathematics teacher consulted me to choose scientific orientated track, since she was sure that I would enjoy more scientifically orientated subjects such as physics and chemistry. Now I am an electrical engineer with an unimaginable passion towards science. Accordingly, teachers and administrators should have the power to decide.
In conclusion, I strongly believe, that teacher and administrator should have the full authority to decide about the education of their students. This is because, students have not the needed maturity level and the foresight to decide about education and because, teacher and administrator are more experienced to pick the best for their students.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 15, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the students') or simply say ''most students''.
Suggestion: most of the students; most students
...n the following essay. First of all, most of students have not the foresight to decide which ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2242.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28773584906 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0283606648 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478773584906 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 678.6 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8916301373 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.4782608696 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4347826087 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.30434782609 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197806463616 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0719161385362 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0839630480434 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138256114086 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0372839510906 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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