In general, people think that in order to be successful people, they have to focus on only doing what they know how to do well. They support that doing what they know how to do well allows people to apply other areas. However, the notion does not reflect the stance that I hold and should not be thought about in a different light. I believe that it is important for people to try new things and task risks in order to be successful people. This is because today’s projects could not be done by only one technology and people are able to get good opportunities to be succeed.
First of all, trying new things and taking risks allow people to do their projects successfully. To be specific, as modern society is becoming dependent on technologies, a great deal of companies requires combining many technologies. Also, customers could not be satisfied if a company provides them their products with one technology. They should offer them products with various technologies. For example, when I was in university, I had a contest for programming with my group, which holds five members. At that time, we got the first prize easily. This was because our competitive did not apply other technologies, just focusing on one technology. It made us grapping the prize. Thus, this proves that it is important for people to try new things and task risks in order to do successfully what they are doing.
Moreover, not only doing what people know how to do well enables people to get good opportunities to be succeed. In other word, in the globalized world, companies require people to do many things beyond their abilities, especially trying new things. It is a way to success and survive in today’s competitive societies, which allows people to get good job opportunities and have a great deal of experience through trying new things. For instance, Steve Jobs, who is the founder of Apple, made great accomplishments in his lifetime. I read online that he was successful because he had always tried to be innovative and learn much knowledge even it is none of his business. His endeavor made him one of the most successful men in the world and he became respected person in most of people who want to be innovative. As a result, this shows that in order to be successful people, people are required to try new things and take risks because they are able to get good opportunities to be succeed than one doing what they know how to do well.
To sum up, I believe that it is more important for people to be adventurous and take risks for becoming successful people. This is because today’s globalized world requires people to have many abilities in every area and they are able to get good opportunities to be succeed. Consequently, the importance of my views cannot be underestimated in that it can kill two birds with one stone for the reasons I have mentioned above. All in all, this trend will probably continue for the next generations.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 776, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...world and he became respected person in most of people who want to be innovative. As a result,...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'consequently', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'thus', 'well', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in general', 'as a result', 'first of all', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.19410745234 0.229887763892 84% => OK
Verbs: 0.204506065858 0.158761421928 129% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0918544194107 0.0866891130778 106% => OK
Adverbs: 0.051993067591 0.046263068375 112% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0693240901213 0.0685040099705 101% => OK
Prepositions: 0.109185441941 0.118717715034 92% => OK
Participles: 0.0381282495667 0.0351676179071 108% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.81528320608 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.053726169844 0.0309702414327 173% => OK
Particles: 0.00173310225303 0.00188951952338 92% => OK
Determiners: 0.050259965338 0.0887237588012 57% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0121317157712 0.0209618222197 58% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0242634315425 0.0139019557991 175% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2946.0 2387.08602151 123% => OK
No of words: 513.0 408.028673835 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.74269005848 5.86048508987 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.48200974243 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.30604288499 0.338922669872 90% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.218323586745 0.251872472559 87% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.159844054581 0.174417080927 92% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.116959064327 0.112833075102 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81528320608 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.421052631579 0.524397521467 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 48.0713309664 59.2087087015 81% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6684587814 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.52 20.5533526081 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9441375535 48.84282405 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.84 120.699889404 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.52 20.5533526081 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.6 0.644075263715 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 42.3523586745 45.7405998639 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.04787234043 1.45489161554 72% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.361826323109 0.300154397459 121% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.12997992244 0.103427244359 126% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.119795051254 0.0752933317313 159% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.447281293319 0.497263757937 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.149675716326 0.151897553556 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138061636509 0.114077575197 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116546159016 0.0781384742642 149% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.458167387273 0.336927656856 136% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0588253515371 0.067059652881 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.274569501981 0.210909579961 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0742253524008 0.0618886996521 120% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8870967742 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 16.0 8.42114695341 190% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.6433691756 139% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.