Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays Medias like TV, radio, newspapers, etc. advertise continuously. Some of these advertisements just are directed towards young children. As far as they are spend many time with watching TV, a controversial question which is often raised is whether television advertising should not be made for them or not. Certainly, some people if asked would agree with the statement that young children should not be allowed see advertisements or television authorities should not allow relieving the advertisements that are directed towards young children, while others have different notion. As far as I'm concerned, I adopt a firm position that television advertisements should not be prepare and broadcast for young children. In what follows I will cogently pinpoint my most conspicuous reasons to justify my point of view.
First of all, it is important to consider due to their age and devoid of any distinguish; they will certainly be fooled and absorbed to these advertisements and doubtlessly request that stuff from their parents. In fact, there are not any thought and idea about quality and worthiness of everything that would be advertised. For instance, my nephew, nowadays bother their parents with requesting everything that he watch in TV advertisement.
Another equally significant point to be mentioned is that in future our society will certainly have some just consumers, that is, if young children watch these advertisements they get used to provide their needs through this way that indeed it is the biggest problem in which we have society with just consumers not producers or creative people.
Finally, demonstrating these advertisements for young children definitely have some other negative problems; for example, young children will certainly turn into people who live based on mode. When young children get used to watch these advertisements, they get used to purchase everything that they see, therefore they will be adult individuals who just eat, dress, walk, and drive only based on mode.
By way of conclusion, based on the arguments explored above, I'm of the opinion that authorities in television should not permit advertising directed towards young children because they are not able to distinguish between good and bad, and in the future our society will face consumers and people who live based on mode. Consequently, it is anticipated that in near future with this strategy of media our society will dealing with very unpleasant situations.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'spent'.
Suggestion: spent
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'many times'.
Suggestion: many times
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...others have different notion. As far as Im concerned, I adopt a firm position that...
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'used to providing'.
Suggestion: used to providing
...ren watch these advertisements they get used to provide their needs through this way that indee...
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'used to purchasing'.
Suggestion: used to purchasing
...to watch these advertisements, they get used to purchase everything that they see, therefore the...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
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Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'deal'
Suggestion: deal
...this strategy of media our society will dealing with very unpleasant situations.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, if, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2095.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35805626598 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9879019454 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50895140665 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 637.2 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.0171481603 48.9658058833 188% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.642857143 100.406767564 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9285714286 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42857142857 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257401679197 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0994915638891 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0807486193772 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139630702509 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0999397714135 0.0645574589148 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 11.7677419355 151% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.