Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I agree with the statement that television advertising directed toward young children, between the ages of two to five years old, should not be allowed. I present in the following paragraphs some reasons why I agree with that idea.
First, young children cannot distinguish advertising from entertainment. While watching some cartoon or another show on the television they do not identify what is the show and what is the break for the advertising. Almost all the advertising directed toward for this public come with light colors and jingles songs. That is a replay of the same strategy used by cartoons and TV shows to catch their attention. For example, I was with a friend Karina and her daughter Alice at the store just buying some soap and hygiene products. While choosing the soap, Alice asked if they could buy a different soap this time, which seemed just a normal question for Karina and me at this point. Like Karina, I had never heard about this soap brand before, so Karina asked her why she wanted exactly this brand. Alice's answer was a surprise jingle song about how the soap cleans all the body and put out all the dirty and bacteria. Karina told me after that day that during Alice's favorite cartoons the TV channel showed the soap advertising at all the break times. Alice was influenced by the soap advertising without even notice that. She could even mix the cartoon song with the soap's jingle song during the day while distracted doing something else.
Second, children at that age can learn from the advertising to value things and behaviors in a wrong way. Young children are learning with everything that they have contact. When an advertising directed toward to them includes the message "you need that", in an explicit or an implicit way, children can understand that it is a necessity that they have. For instance, I can remember an advertising when I was a child, which a little boy showed his scissors of a cartoon character while saying: "I have this but you do not". The boy said it for many times during the whole advertising. I had this scissors. I am sure that it was the only time that I choose a scissors to use at school. It was important for me that no one could said to me the same thing as the boy was saying in the advertising. Of course, I did not understand that the advertising was not only inducing me to choose the scissors but was giving me the value that it is not good to be the one that does not have what the other has.
In conclusion, I believe that advertising for children should not be allowed. Children cannot distinguish advertising from entertainment. They do not understand when they are making a decision induced by the advertising. Worse than that, young children learn with every new information they get and the advertising can teach wrong value to them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2371.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 497.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77062374245 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64804479909 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460764587525 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 716.4 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8120289461 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.1923076923 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1153846154 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.30769230769 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243119694721 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0790355507819 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10723877645 0.0737576698707 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227623337643 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.171172207391 0.0645574589148 265% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.77 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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