Do you agree or disagree the following statement? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.

A controversy is often raised about the ethics of broadcasting advertisement towards young children. Some groups of people hold the view that advertisement does not harm children. However, some others may hold an opposing view and feel that targeting advertisement to young children may indeed harm children. In my vantage point, I concur with the later and point and provide three reasons of support.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that advertisement rib parent's money, Many parents complain of the expensive toys being advertised. In fact, Children do not distinguish that both toys are exactly identical. However, because children watch the advertisement, they become interested of buying the one being advertised. For instance, there are many dolls available in the market, however, because children watch the barbie advertisement, they refuse to buy any other brand but barbie.

The second point which is worth giving it some thought is the time children waste on watching these advertisement. Children can make better use of their time reading a story or playing games. While some parents feel that there is no harm of watching advertisement, I strongly believe that the time wasted can be capitalized on improving children's other skill like hearing a story, or exercising in the fields. A vivid example to illustrate my point is time my child spend on watching these advertisement. It is crystal clear that children are not only wasting their time, but also learning bad habits.

Although the aforementioned reason are the first to cross my mind at a glance, they are by no means the only reason available. In fact, there is another subtle point available. The noteworthy refreshing, intelligible study published in the Journal of pediatrics which concluded that children are more likely to learn bad eating habits as they watch TV advertisement. The study was conducted on 120 children of different age to prevent any bias.

Finally contemplating all the aforementioned reasons one soon realizes that TV advertisement does not only drain the parents pockets, but also encourages children to be more materialistic which is a bad habit that is hard to get rid of as they grow up.

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Average: 7.5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, second, so, while, for instance, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1854.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19327731092 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98480118686 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526610644258 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4254909254 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.0 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8333333333 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72222222222 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153852823716 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0558062525332 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0463131437624 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0893082988056 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414298299524 0.0645574589148 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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