Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, by increasing the different production companies, the competition among them is more important than before and thus the selling of products is a considerable issue for the managers of companies. There are many methods for achieving this goal that one of them is television advertising. As we know, Tv is the most substantial media in the world that has a profound effect on people's life. As far as I am concerned, Tv advertising towards young children should be allowed for companies because of enhancing the incomes of companies and causing people, especially children to be happy.
The firs reason of current discussion is about the earning of companies that are the most important reason of working for them. In this regard, it should be noted that by advertising the products on Tv, the number of selling products will be improved and thus the overall income will be more than before. imagine the advertising with a child.This is a different kind of advertising that is interesting for people and has a positive effect on selling products. For instance, when a child participates in children clothes advertising, the parents will love more this advertising rather than an advertising without children because it is unusual and push parents to compare that child with their children. So, they have more tendency to buy the clothes for their children. Therefore, enhancing the incomes is one of the noticeable results of using children in Tv advertising.
Another noteworthy reason that I don't agree with above statement is the happiness of children. Research showed that when a child sees another child in TV or any media, he will be a focus on him and started to smile or play with him. So, one of the methods to reach this purpose is playing children in Tv advertising. In other words, a child would be attracted to Tv by seeing another child in Tv advertising and will be happy. For example, when a child plays toy advertising in Tv, any child that see this advertising will try to be near the Tv and play with that child and thus be glad in few moments. So, this kind of advertising causes happiness in children that are the most momentous issue in our society.
In conclusion, we discussed above that TV advertising directed towards children has two major effects that encouraged us to apply it. Even though it has some disadvantages, but from my point of view, the advantages are more than disadvantages and thus companies want to use this kind of TV advertising.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2068.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87735849057 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86090252559 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.441037735849 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 628.2 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7339462104 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.888888889 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5555555556 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27777777778 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187163716681 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0705575564435 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0579646129305 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122897290407 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0164935731084 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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