Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should
spend more money on improving facilities (eg. labs and general equipment)
than on hiring famous professors.
In today's convoluted and competitive world, it becomes a highly charged and a hot topic whether universities should invest their budget in improving facilities or hiring more well-known teachers. Some people are the leading the claim of that it is better for universities to employ more famous professors. However, others may take an opposite point of view and believe that spending more budget on university equipment will bring more benefits for universities. If I have to face these two choices, I tend to choose the latter idea. There are some significant reasons, the most outstanding of which will be discussed in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, students are supposed to attend the society in the near future. If they are educated and prepared well, they will be able to a positive contribution to the society. To elaborate on, we know that students are bombarded with a great deal of theoretical knowledge and information in classrooms, if they do not put their knowledge into practice, they will not apply them in the real world. Hence, by investing more money on lab equipment, they are allowed to merge the theoretical and experimental knowledge in tandem, which renders them more knowledgeable and educated student who will not have any problem in their future lives. Let me give you an example might make this viewpoint more evident. After graduating, I applied for the Aristech University, and then, I was invited to an interview via Skype, during discussion about my background, I was asked to tell them about my experimental experience, owing to lack of any equipment in my previous university, I could not tell anything about it, and eventually, I was rejected. For this reason, had my previous university equipped with the experimental apparatus, I would have accepted for that position.
Apart from preparing student effectively, the second debatable point is that on the one hand, some people believe that it cannot be a great decision for a university because the cost of maintenance and fixing facilities will increase and it would not be affordable for universities. On the other hand, some other people believe that if universities have more facilities, the enrollment rate of a student will heighten, and the consumed money will back. I take the former viewpoint with a pinch of salt and claim that the latter viewpoint is much closer to the reality, for I do believe that the more a university have more sophisticated labs and equipment, the more students are persuaded to come to this university, For this reason, by spending budget on improving university facilities not only their money will not be wasted, but also they are able to earn money by having more students.
To wrap it up, by considering all aforementioned reasons, one can realize soon, investing university budget in improving facilities is more beneficial compared to hiring famous professors inasmuch as in the first place, students are educated better by seizing the opportunity of learning deeply, in the second place, the university enrollment rate will be increased and university will earn more money
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, second, so, then, well, apart from, to begin with, in the first place, in the second place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2613.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 510.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12352941176 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93547224629 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466666666667 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 850.5 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 113.458262563 48.9658058833 232% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 163.3125 100.406767564 163% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.875 20.6045352989 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 5.45110844103 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230247195666 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0785776211348 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0603415476809 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159075353459 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346698876111 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 11.7677419355 158% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.55 58.1214874552 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 10.1575268817 163% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.01 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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