Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Working at home using
computers or telephones is better than working in the office.
In today's convoluted and competitive world, it becomes a highly charged and hot debate topic whether it is better working at home or working in the office. Therefore, some people are the leading proponent of the claim that working at home would be more beneficial. However. Some people may take an opposite point of view and believe that working at home bring more benefits to people. If I have to face these two choices, I tend to choose the latter point. There are some reasons, the most outstanding of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin with, people would be more productive when working in the office. To elaborate on, we believe that no one is impeccable and the problem is an inevitable part of each working. Hence, when people face problems related to their work, their issues will be solved if they ask their co-workers. In contrast, a bunch of their time will be wasted if their work at their home owing to think about the problem by themselves resulting in mitigating their productivity. Let me give you an example might make this viewpoint much better. When I was working in an office, I could increase my performance by doing interdisciplinary work because I was not adroit at all facet of my work. My co-worker and I, each of us studied in a different filed, always consulted in tandem to be able to increase the quality of work. For this reason, had I stayed at home, I could not have accomplished that project by myself owing to lack of ability in other fields.
Apart from increasing efficiency of work, the second debatable point is that on the one hand, some people believe that because of the presence of other employees, one cannot concentrate on his/her duties which might result in quitting the job. However, on the other hand, some others believe that when working in the office, their interpersonal skills will be boosted not only they can work in a friendly environment, but also due to enhancing this ability, it is not far-fetching to promote in his job. I take the former viewpoint with a pinch of salt and claim that the latter viewpoint is much closer to the reality, for I do believe that the more people work in the office in tandem with other workers, the more their they have an excellent relationship with others due to the fact that it brings them prosperous future. As a result, when people working in an office, others workers can increase their concentration by making the environment more friendly compared to working at home, which makes their home a monotonic atmosphere.
To wrap it up, by considering all aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes the importance of working in the office that would be more beneficial. inasmuch as in the first place, their performance will be enhanced by resolving their problems by asking others or doing collaborative work, in the second place, the environment of work stimulates them to work with high concentration resulting in their prosperity.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: However,
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Suggestion: Inasmuch
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, apart from, in contrast, as a result, to begin with, in the first place, in the second place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2457.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 509.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82711198428 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75978362921 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453831041257 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 773.1 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.7951670573 48.9658058833 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.315789474 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7894736842 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.31578947368 5.45110844103 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285012933625 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107614125613 0.076458572812 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0783381646139 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206162703108 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0262179073766 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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