Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children(five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Since dawn of civilization, education has definitely played a prominent role in all advanced societies. Due to its paramount importance, scholars delve deeply into finding better and more effective ways in education. Some hold a view that education in elementry school are more important. However some other take an opposite viewpoint and believe that spending money on universities is more effective. I personally agree with second group. In the following paragraphs, I will elucidate my perspective.
The most significant view to be mentioned is that universiy is the most important and fundamental place to cunduct research such as medical research, social survey or psycological research. Some of them like medical research need advanced laboratories with modern equipments. These stuffs are really expensive and need a hich budget. I can remember when I worked in my research project, some of chemichal substances cost about 5000 $ or even more. My friend in medical laboratory always complained about low budget and as a result insufficient materials. In contrast, elementry schools just need simple bench and other instruments because they learn basic of subject. Sometimes a book and a whtieboard is enough to convey clearly information to students.
Another important reason is that based on psychological survey physical acitivity has equal importace to learning in the elementry school. Children in the a age of five to then are in fysical growth. Based on psychological resarch, playing is more important to physical and even mental growth in childhood. In modern elementry school, children have more physical activities like sports than sitting in the classes and listening to their teachers. In contrast, in the universities the main responsibilies are to discuss about different subjects and give presentations. Nowaday, better presentations need electronic equipments in every class.
In conclusion education is very important form childhood to adulthood.All educational levels from elementry school to high school to universites need money. However, research projects and advanced equipments in universities explain the importance ot spending more money there.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, really, second, so, then, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 43.0788530466 37% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1854.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 328.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.65243902439 4.8611393121 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13825334646 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.603658536585 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 586.8 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.3964908519 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2857142857 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.619047619 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.14285714286 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159227081452 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0449289820621 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472436436128 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111017510401 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0662590636626 0.0645574589148 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.33 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.19 10.9000537634 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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