Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
There is no doubt that obtaining the job position plays the prominent role in people's lives. No one can blind eye to the great influence of quality of the job on our lives. A controversial question is raised related to the issue is that what is more significant? Having the job or not having the job untill obtaining the satistying job position. Some people may hold the viewpoint that they should take the right away the job opportunity rather. However, the others look this concept from different lens and believe that they should wait to achieve the enjoyable job. In my perspective, the first belief is true, From what follows, I will pinpoint some of outstanding reasons.
One of the most predominant reason coming mind related to the issue is that from psychological stand point, nowadays, people is under the pressure an most of them, especially the younger, have the stress of finding the job. So, if one person seeking the job find one job position even not very satisfying, he should take it. This job helps him to release his stress about finding job. Take the Iranian students as an example. Most of them have the same stress from their study time in university. The worry about their future carrier after graduations owing to the stagnation. Therefore, finding the job, even not very enjoyable, can reveal their pressure and eliminate their concerns.
Furthermore, the other equally principal reason advocated my idea is that people can select this job and floorish their talents. This means that they can take the secure jobe opportunity and find in it the field which they can be successful in it. For example, my brother's major was construction engineering and he was exploring the job five years ago. One company suggested him an opportunity as a superviser of importants and he accepted. He was able learn this work and built a rapport between his major and that work. So, now, he is one of the most prestigious person in the field of improting the constructionn materials. Consequently, taking the secure job helped him to be prosper and thrive his talent.
The last but not the least reason is that wating for achieving the satisfying job opportunity and starting to work in it is more convinient. Every person incline to find a job which he likes it. But, sometimes, based upon situation and the country, it is not rational to wait untill finding secure job according to the fact that there is no recruiting about this field. So, if one person want to make money to earn his living, he should choose the secure job. Moreover, he is able to opt this job, make money and shift his field to the satisfying field. This means that the secure job can be employed as a tool for reaching the target and achieing the enjoyable job.
From what has been mentioned above, if one weights the merits and dimerits of takin secure job opportunity, he can safely reach the conclusion that having the secure job has profound advantagous and is more convinient. It is hard to disguise that the satisfying job may has some benefits lsuch as enjoying about performing it. Despite of this fact, choosing one secure job is more proper than wating for finding the satisfying job. All in all, it is anticipated that people will tend to seek and take the secure job more and more because of the said reasons.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 148, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'consequently', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'therefore', 'for example', 'no doubt', 'such as', 'what is more']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.209119496855 0.229887763892 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.179245283019 0.158761421928 113% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0691823899371 0.0866891130778 80% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0534591194969 0.046263068375 116% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0660377358491 0.0685040099705 96% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0990566037736 0.118717715034 83% => OK
Participles: 0.061320754717 0.0351676179071 174% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.5758460045 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0267295597484 0.0309702414327 86% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.122641509434 0.0887237588012 138% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0235849056604 0.0209618222197 113% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00786163522013 0.0139019557991 57% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3304.0 2387.08602151 138% => OK
No of words: 576.0 408.028673835 141% => OK
Chars per words: 5.73611111111 5.86048508987 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89897948557 4.48200974243 109% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.305555555556 0.338922669872 90% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.210069444444 0.251872472559 83% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.161458333333 0.174417080927 93% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.111111111111 0.112833075102 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5758460045 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.439236111111 0.524397521467 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 52.2192405102 59.2087087015 88% => OK
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6684587814 150% => OK
Sentence length: 18.5806451613 20.5533526081 90% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6166069509 48.84282405 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.580645161 120.699889404 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5806451613 20.5533526081 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.483870967742 0.644075263715 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 39.5875896057 45.7405998639 87% => OK
Elegance: 1.23684210526 1.45489161554 85% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.433373396877 0.300154397459 144% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.100490757713 0.103427244359 97% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0679816184478 0.0752933317313 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.51886077548 0.497263757937 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.120363884975 0.151897553556 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.170720815223 0.114077575197 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0878505673249 0.0781384742642 112% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.539994836247 0.336927656856 160% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0507814520619 0.067059652881 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.320587639261 0.210909579961 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524867047941 0.0618886996521 85% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8870967742 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.86379928315 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 17.0 8.42114695341 202% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.4623655914 244% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 28.0 13.6433691756 205% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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