Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The monetary issues are the most important things in everyone's life, and children should be advised to have a plan for their future careers. Nowadays, some parents believe that children should choose their jobs, but it is precisely the opposite of what I think.
The first reason is that such thoughts were prevalent in the past and today are not popular among youths. Many years ago, many people worked on the market, and children are taught the same jobs from the early ages of youth. Also, the types of jobs were severely limited, e.g. there were not jobs related to information technology, communication and so on and almost jobs were not related to education. In contrary, nowadays roughly half of professions are linked to the children education. Children can freely choose their fields of interest and pursue their studies in graduate school. Before choosing majors, students are guided by consultants to determine which field is the best for children and in which area students are most talented. It can be seen that the living conditions are much different from the past and children should not be advised to choose their parents' jobs as before.
The second reason is that today many factors influence on selecting a career like salary, workplace environment and so on. It is probably that the parents' jobs are not enough paid as other jobs; under these circumstances, why children should choose their parents' jobs? What's more, an individual workplace environment may not be compatible with a child. If the child were compelled to accept that job, he/she would lack any motivation and would be reluctant to do his/her duties perfectly. For example, my father who had a fast food strongly recommended me to join him in his fast food. Although, its income was high but working in a fast-food was not what I imagined as for my future career. I liked to continue my academic goals and get my Ph.D. in aerospace engineering, so I rejected my father's recommendation. My personal experience clearly shows that compelling children to choose the parent's jobs is not a good idea.
In the light of the aforementioned details regarding the presented issue, I am of the opinion that choosing the same parents' jobs is not a perfect scheme. In fact, students should be allowed to choose their interested job freely.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, e.g., first, if, may, regarding, second, so, as for, for example, i think, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1931.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95128205128 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66420127652 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541025641026 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.127992514 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 101.631578947 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5263157895 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.89473684211 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.358095110304 0.236089414692 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111894341391 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0957518334875 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227786524054 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0576143686374 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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