Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for people to move out of their hometowns when they become adults, instead of staying in their home communities for their whole lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Although modernization is more expanded, there is different between life in villages and life in cities. Cities with varieties of good works, facilities, … is place where attracts almost people. It is argued that people when become adults should move out of their hometowns. in my opinion, I believe that people should not live in the same place for their whole lives, despite of that, they could move to other places. Living in a same way for a long time make people feel boring. They would feel that live have nothing new for them to try and develop. Due to that fact, people have trend move out of their hometowns because they want to discover interesting life outside of their villages.
When people live in their hometowns, they would not have more chances than living in the cities. Cities, especially capital, is the most developing place of the countries. Live in cities would make a lot of opportunities have works for many people. When people move to cities, they would have a work easier first. Meanwhile, it is difficulty having a work in villages, cities where economic develop outstanding need many people work for them.
Additionally, there is a fact that govern take care of built good facilities for cities more than villages. People leave their hometowns to cities means that they are reaching to better live. There is enough essential condition for people to live comfortable in cities. Hospitals with the best doctors, modern playgrounds, theater, transportation, …all of them are enough to say cities is worth living.
More importantly, when people live in cities, they would meet other people and marry. Their family would live in cities. I think it is a good decision because not only adults but also children are received more benefits from living in cities than living in villages. Children is received the best education in cities. There are a lot of schools where have the best plan to develop a child to become a useful person. Besides that, children are familiar earlier with foreign language, for example English. School and English center are available for children to study English early. It is thing that children live in villages is not given.
In conclusion, I recommend that people should leave their hometowns instead of living in the same community for their whole life. Some people could say that every people move to cities, who would develop villages. However, I believe that not all people could live good in cities, they must be people who have enough skill and knowledge. The rest would still live in their hometowns and government surely have policy help them product their hometown better.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, so, still, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2200.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95495495495 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45051669227 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.43018018018 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 681.3 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Interrogative: 4.0 0.994623655914 402% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.2424767928 48.9658058833 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.5714285714 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8571428571 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85714285714 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27807556464 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.095520006415 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0879206026997 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192447906555 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0781957838149 0.0645574589148 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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