Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
It is no secret that event which happening around the world are important in human's life. Due to its paramount importance, abundance of controversial questions always exist among people. One of the contentious questions which is often raised regarding this issue is whether people should know all of the happening in the world even if they are not relevant them or this isn't an important factor in their life. Although some people hold the view that it isn't essential to become aware about all the news or happening events, I nonetheless, firmly contend that in spite of all demerits, knowing all the events enjoys a number of advantages. In following paragraphs, I will illuminate my perspective by elaborating two outstanding reasons.
The first compelling reason to be mentioned is that knowing about events happening around the world not only, will increase our knowledge, but also it helps us to become more aware. Strictly speaking the more people collect information about their world, the more knowledge they obtain. For instance, knowing about technological development in all over the world is so essential for all the people. No one can cast a shadow of doubt on the fact that in our technological world many events can affect our life, therefore, people should move at the same speed of technology motion in order to not lag behind the social atmosphere they are dealing with. The more the people are knowledgeable about their world, the more chance they acquire to update themselves with the latest version of technology and improvement of it. What may come as a surprise is the accumulation of some evidence showing that a considerable number of educated people in our country follow various events in the world, consequently, as we can see the education and knowing about events has the close relationship with each other.
Another equally significant reason which deserves some words here is that as people are informed about some events which may not affect their routine life, they may become interested in some new field. Needless to say that the more awareness about specific subjects leads to more interest in it. Thus, it is obvious that by knowing about all the events, even unrelated, we make an opportunity for themselves to increase our chance of releasing our potential talent. To shed more light into this issue I would like to mention my own experience. Until 2 years ago I didn't like to follow political events in the world, and I just followed the political events in our country, once, I had heard some news about the political events about the other country, thus, after this time, I became interested in following these events. This experience indicates the benefits of knowing about such events which are unrelated to our life.
In brief, all of the aforementioned reasons lead us to conclusion that knowing about all the events around the world can benefit people in many ways. This opportunity not only increase their knowledge and awareness, but it also provides new situations for them to become interested in a new field. Admittedly, these two essential factors will help people to improve in their life. All in all, it is anticipated that in future people will take these crucial factors into account in order to improve.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, may, nonetheless, regarding, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in brief, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 85.0 52.1666666667 163% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2722.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 546.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98534798535 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83390555256 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69904715772 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454212454212 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 870.3 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.9071899766 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.619047619 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7619047619 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29140850071 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0973436525814 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0654004064067 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193841411566 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0572657753376 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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