Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
When it comes to the issue of whether parents should encourage their children to take a part time job, some people may hold the idea that it is unnecessary for teenagers to take part in any kind of part-time job as they should focus more on their study. However, others believe that it is a good preparatory step for them to enter adulthood. Personally, I am in favor of the second option.
First and foremost, part-time jobs motivate adolescences to be more responsible. It can not be denied that once taken a part-time job, young people have to followed the rules from the place they work in. They always have to show up in time for work if they do not want to be given a shack. Not only that but they also begin to develop the idea of what it is like to be in a working environment. They will have to try hard to fulfill the requirements from the boss and finish their job without any help from their parents. One example can be taken from the story of my cousin who was once lazy and dependent. When he reached eighteen his dad got him a job in a shop nearby. At first he found it difficult to follow the rules; nevertheless he got used to it in the end and became responsible in every thing he does.
Secondly, part- time jobs offer young people the chance to develop their communicating skill. Jobs require people to interact to do it to the fullest, hence young people are bound to meet up with new people. For example, my father was a shy teenager, but after just a few months working in dinner, he became a lot more open and talkative. He began to make conversations with new people, thus making a lot of new friends and connections that are still helpful nowadays. In conclusion, for the mentioned reason it is beneficial for teenagers to get a part-time job because they can not only learn to be more responsible but also to develop their interaction skill. Those are the most elementary step for young adolescences to be ready for their adult life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...ould encourage their children to take a part time job, some people may hold the idea that...
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Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...cousin who was once lazy and dependent. When he reached eighteen his dad got him a j...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'nevertheless', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still', 'thus', 'for example', 'in conclusion', 'kind of']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.198979591837 0.229887763892 87% => OK
Verbs: 0.168367346939 0.158761421928 106% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0892857142857 0.0866891130778 103% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0637755102041 0.046263068375 138% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0892857142857 0.0685040099705 130% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.107142857143 0.118717715034 90% => OK
Participles: 0.0204081632653 0.0351676179071 58% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.54770575523 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0612244897959 0.0309702414327 198% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.00510204081633 0.00188951952338 270% => OK
Determiners: 0.0841836734694 0.0887237588012 95% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0178571428571 0.0209618222197 85% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0127551020408 0.0139019557991 92% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1965.0 2387.08602151 82% => OK
No of words: 362.0 408.028673835 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42817679558 5.86048508987 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48200974243 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.24861878453 0.338922669872 73% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.17679558011 0.251872472559 70% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.118784530387 0.174417080927 68% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0939226519337 0.112833075102 83% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54770575523 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513812154696 0.524397521467 98% => OK
Word variations: 55.0206049311 59.2087087015 93% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 21.2941176471 20.5533526081 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6217071263 48.84282405 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.588235294 120.699889404 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2941176471 20.5533526081 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.941176470588 0.644075263715 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.5376344086 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 38.9736756581 45.7405998639 85% => OK
Elegance: 1.01587301587 1.45489161554 70% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.422817158908 0.300154397459 141% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.110881791242 0.103427244359 107% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0932220316434 0.0752933317313 124% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.478923650269 0.497263757937 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.15491989766 0.151897553556 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.168260909989 0.114077575197 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.083029039908 0.0781384742642 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.468868425554 0.336927656856 139% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0492214120107 0.067059652881 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.338829202274 0.210909579961 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0226456984501 0.0618886996521 37% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.