Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.
The answer to this question can be varied from person to person. In my opinion, nowadays, parents care about their children's education than did parents in the past. There are some reasons, the most outstanding of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
The first reason coming to my mind is that due to the competitive aspect of the job market, finding a decent job is increasingly becoming much more difficult than the past. Since parents are aware towards this fact, they are trying to assist their children in their education to become successful in the future. Hence, they spend a lot of money on the learning procedure of their children by providing more and more facilities such as a laptop, new books, and so forth. An example will illustrate this viewpoint much better. When I was a graduate student, I decided to continue my study at the university abroad. Since I was sure that I did not have any difficulties to find a great and well-paid job after graduations; therefore, my father told me that he would support me financially. For this reason, had my father not supported me, I would not have become. As a result, I strongly believe that due to a high ratio of unemployment, parents should help their children to become prosperous in their lives.
Another reason why I agree it is the progression of technology. In fact, the rapid growth of technology provides a lot of tools engaging children such as a smartphone, video games, social network, all of which cause children spend a great deal of their time on them. Nowadays, parents have many problems with these type of means which keep away students from education. For example, when I was an undergraduate student, I had a part-time job at the university campus magazine as a reporter. As I remember, one time, I interviewed with the professor Nejati, who is a well-known psychologist in our country. He told me that a large number of parents come to his office in order to learn how to behave with their children who spend a great deal of their time on playing video games. Also, he told me that the ratio of parents who have this problem is not comparable people living in the past. As a result of the progression of technology, parents allocate more time to care for children in their education.
In conclusion, no one can deny the role of parents in the success of today's children. Not only do they spend a lot of their time on their education, but also they support them in a wide variety of circumstances.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2056.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68337129841 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75158962769 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496583143508 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 644.4 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2132072933 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.9047619048 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9047619048 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.80952380952 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279616338009 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0855673490419 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0874646127792 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180927454179 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0150540237359 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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