Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing.
Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
Many people could agree with the idea to do sometimes things they are not comfortable with because it could be benefitial. For example, hard work or painful trainings could make a person stronger or healthier. On the other hand, others cuould disagree with this claim looking to be involve with activities that result more enjoyable. Personally, I strong believe that is better to avoid doing things that are not of my plasure, and I am giving my reasons below.
First, I believe life is too short to spent our time in things that we can not enjoy. Moreover, under the risk of being accused of being frivole, I afirm that this claim is actually very profound. To illustrate my point, I would bring a time when I was in danger and I though about how many things I would have like to do and might not have the time to achieve. Why do we have to waste time in doing something that we do not enjoy? The answer of that question is we do not need to. Briefly, life is too short to waste it in things that we do not enjoy.
Secondly, people that do not enjoy life are less healthy. According to recent studies, the cerotonine is a natural horomona that is realise when we are delight for some situation. The cerotonine, or the happiness hormone, actually makes as happier, and in consequence, makes us healthier. Following this idea, doing things that are enjoyable provokes the realise of cerotonine; thus, it would make us healthier.
In conclusion, I disagree with the thesis provide that claims that people should do sometimes things that are not enjoyable, because of the two reason I gave for support before.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 42, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put before the verb 'do'.
Suggestion: sometimes do
...any people could agree with the idea to do sometimes things they are not comfortable with be...
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Line 1, column 356, Rule ID: BELIEVE_BELIEF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'belief' (noun) instead of believe (verb)?
Suggestion: belief
...lt more enjoyable. Personally, I strong believe that is better to avoid doing things th...
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Line 5, column 133, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'realised'.
Suggestion: realised
...erotonine is a natural horomona that is realise when we are delight for some situation....
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Line 5, column 352, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...oing things that are enjoyable provokes the realise of cerotonine; thus, it would make us h...
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Line 7, column 82, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put before the verb 'do'.
Suggestion: sometimes do
... provide that claims that people should do sometimes things that are not enjoyable, because ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, briefly, first, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1330.0 1977.66487455 67% => OK
No of words: 287.0 407.700716846 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63414634146 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52051038461 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 212.727598566 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505226480836 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 414.9 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.6351886015 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.6666666667 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1333333333 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.93333333333 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.393518541716 0.236089414692 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137594940888 0.076458572812 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108138049018 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243768858953 0.150856017488 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0484321454894 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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