It is commonly accepted that spending money to have a short-time pleasure is wasting money and it is better to spend money on something that is viable. I disagree with this belief and think that sometimes spending money on short-time pleasures is more beneficial than spending money on viable things. My statement will be substantiated by the following paragraphs.
To begin with, at the time of buying long-lasting things we may feel pleasure but after a while, we lose our interest to them. Even more, often we do not like them after passing the time and seeing them makes us bored. My own experience is a good example of such situation. Two years ago, while I was working in Microsoft, I had saved a large amount of money. Once I decided to spend them for my pleasure. The first thought was going to an adventure tour to Africa along with my friends. The second thought was buying a modern car for myself. At the time, when I talked with my parents, both of them encouraged me to buy a modern car as a long-lasting pleasure. I followed their advice and did not go to Africa tour and bought a new car. Two months later, when my friends came back from Africa, I realized that my decision was wrong. My friends had a great time during their vacation such that they still talk about their fun and new experiences while I had chosen to buy a modern car which I was not excited on it anymore. I do know that can now buy my car to go to an adventure tour of Africa, however, in my opinion, the tour is not enjoyable because I am alone in the tour and none of my friends comes with me.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that sometimes buying long-lasting goods such as a necklace has a short-lasting effect while performing short-lasting activities such as traveling has a long-lasting effect. Take the example of buying car and going to a trip, again. While I currently dislike my car, my friends still talk about their memories during the trip. In addition, we sometimes need to do something new which greatly fresh our mind, however, spending money to buy goods cannot affect on our mind in this way. For instance, although buying a piece of jewelry might make us happy, its pleasure does not make us relax and fresh, while a trip can do it.
Due to the aforementioned ground, I firmly believe that spending money on long-lasting goods instead of performing activities which provide short-term pleasure is not always preferable. In my point of view, spending money to receive short-term pleasures is not wasting money due to its positive effects on our mind and memories.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 521, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...ver, spending money to buy goods cannot affect on our mind in this way. For instance, alt...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, while, for instance, in addition, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2143.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 475.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.51157894737 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45486322686 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465263157895 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 660.6 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5375898487 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.4090909091 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5909090909 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45454545455 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28331124502 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0817395927725 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0710626144511 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195557298469 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.067331389204 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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