Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is an ongoing discussion on whether people who can sustain small circle of friends for a long time will be happier in life than people who only able to get new friends readily. In my opinion, I strongly believe that happiness of people relies on the sense of connecting with new people and developing friendships easily. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in this following essay.
First of all, the more people we know, the broader knowledge we gain, making life more fulfilling. In life, we learn a lot from people around us, and different individual has various kinds of experience that we might never know before. My personal experience is a compelling example of this point. I decided to go to an exchange program in Japan during my undergraduate study. Coming alone from Thailand, I tried to mingle with new Japanese friends promptly. I thought it would be hard for me to live with people with different language, lifestyle, and culture. However, I found that learning something new from my new friends is one of the most enjoyable experience I had ever have. My friend named Sora taught me to eat cold soba, which became my most favorite Japanese food until now. Thus, I am convinced that meeting extra new friends is one of the best ways to be happy.
Secondly, having more diverse network can help us in our career, especially in the business field. Sometimes it is needed to ask for help or for more information from others, whether those from different backgrounds or those from other locations. For example, I once was assigned to research about a housing business in the United States. At first, I had no idea how to get such information, since I was never work in that location before. Nonetheless, I met a new friend from a church I went and discovered that he used to work in real estate industry in New York City for almost ten years. After a discussion about my project with him, he offered me a contact person that I could interview for my research. As a result, I gained tremendous useful information from that person and complete the project on time.
In conclusion, I believe that gaining more new friends can make people happier. This is because new friends can give you more new experience and help you in work.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1874.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67331670823 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60442984773 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548628428928 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 583.2 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.3467038174 48.9658058833 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.2380952381 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0952380952 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52380952381 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243116301924 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0727238433548 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058814348186 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168026293245 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524782221456 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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