In general, people think that it is more important for young people to learn from the celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes. They support that the celebrated are able to experience a lot of matters what normal people could not experience. However, the notion does not reflect the stance that I hold and should not be thought about in a different light. I believe that for young people, the older people’s opinions are more important than that of celebrities. This is because the old are capable to guide young people with their long-lasted experience and the celebrated have just specific experience within their area, such as entertaining or athletics.
First of all, the opinions from the old make young people to guide the right way in an early age. To be specific, as time has passed, people must experience a great deal of things during their life time. Their experience could not be underestimated in that it would affect on other people’s life and young people who advised by the old are likely to take right ways in their life. For example, when I was a kid, I had lived with grandparents. They always told me their life story in order to advice and teach me to follow a correct way without fail. Their stories were interesting for me and it makes me to follow the correct direction in my life. Thus, the opinions from the old are more important for young people in order to follow the correct path in an early age.
Moreover, the opinions from the celebrated tend to live limited lives. In other word, they should train themselves from the early age for a long time and follow the only way to go their goal. It is true for them to follow the same way from the early age; however, for young people, it might not be worthy. This is because most young people would not like to be the celebrated and follow their ways where they choose for their purpose. For instance, Il Gook Song, who was the famous actor in Korea, had an interview with The Korean Herald last Tuesday. He said that I regret to be actor because I do not have my personal time for my life and am always monitored by someone. It makes me be depressed and there is no my place to live with happiness. As a result, the opinions from the celebrated are less important for young people than the old because they are not likely to live for themselves, which make lack of experience to advice young people.
To sum up, I believe that the opinions from the old are more important for young generations than the celebrated. This is because the old are capable to guide young people to follow the correct way and the celebrated with limited life are not capable to advice young people. Consequently, the importance of my views cannot be underestimated in that it can kill two birds with one stone for the reasons I have mentioned above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 193, Rule ID: LIFE_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
...nce a great deal of things during their life time. Their experience could not be underest...
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Line 2, column 266, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
... not be underestimated in that it would affect on other people's life and young peop...
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Line 3, column 567, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[2]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'regret being'.
Suggestion: regret being
...ean Herald last Tuesday. He said that I regret to be actor because I do not have my personal...
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Discourse Markers used:
['consequently', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'thus', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in general', 'such as', 'as a result', 'first of all', 'it is true', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.185053380783 0.229887763892 80% => OK
Verbs: 0.165480427046 0.158761421928 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.119217081851 0.0866891130778 138% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0444839857651 0.046263068375 96% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0782918149466 0.0685040099705 114% => OK
Prepositions: 0.129893238434 0.118717715034 109% => OK
Participles: 0.0302491103203 0.0351676179071 86% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.5218580416 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0391459074733 0.0309702414327 126% => OK
Particles: 0.0017793594306 0.00188951952338 94% => OK
Determiners: 0.0907473309609 0.0887237588012 102% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.017793594306 0.0209618222197 85% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0106761565836 0.0139019557991 77% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2827.0 2387.08602151 118% => OK
No of words: 507.0 408.028673835 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57593688363 5.86048508987 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.48200974243 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.272189349112 0.338922669872 80% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.183431952663 0.251872472559 73% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.122287968442 0.174417080927 70% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0927021696252 0.112833075102 82% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5218580416 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.396449704142 0.524397521467 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 44.9728885146 59.2087087015 76% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0434782609 20.5533526081 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2563927893 48.84282405 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.913043478 120.699889404 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0434782609 20.5533526081 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.652173913043 0.644075263715 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 40.3866735271 45.7405998639 88% => OK
Elegance: 1.1975308642 1.45489161554 82% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.40066448305 0.300154397459 133% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.146218727794 0.103427244359 141% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.113167809534 0.0752933317313 150% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.521825196265 0.497263757937 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.140226973432 0.151897553556 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.17412552216 0.114077575197 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0870672989391 0.0781384742642 111% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.586598483691 0.336927656856 174% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0672892220293 0.067059652881 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.330435136781 0.210909579961 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0560103722902 0.0618886996521 91% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8870967742 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 8.42114695341 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 13.6433691756 154% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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