do you agree or disagree: it is better to use your own knowledge and experience to solve problems than to ask other people for advice
In today’s convoluted and competitive world, it becomes a highly charged and a widespread hot topic whether it is better to solve our problems by our own knowledge and experience or ask other for advice. Therefore, some people are the leading of the claim that it is more beneficial for people to ask other to cope with problems. However, others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that people should their own information and knowledge to solve their obstacles. There are some reasons, the most outstanding of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin with, if people reach their pinnacles by themselves, the will be an independent one. To elaborate on, we are taught to be responsible when seeking to find a solution for our problems. Nowadays, we are living in a complex era and people are facing a host of difficulties, their motivation will be boosted by solving their problem by their own knowledge and information, what is better, by becoming autonomous person, they will not face any huge problem for the rest of their life, because by having a greater impetus, they will not fear when they face a problem. An example will illustrate this viewpoint much better. When I was a high-school student, I was allowed to solve my problem based on my previous experience by my parents. Since they were aware of the future life, they enabled me to face the problems by myself. For this reason, when I entered the university, I was an independent man, and therefore I did not have any difficulty to solve my problems. for this reasons, had they not allowed me to make a decision when facing problems based on my own information, I would not have become independent and faced many problems in my future lives.
Apart from independence, another striking reason is that so important has time been that human beings' mind has deeply involved from all over the world. Hence, On the one hand, some people believe that when people want to solve their issues by themselves, most of their time will be taken and they eventually cannot find a suitable solution at an appointed time. On the other hand, others believe that, nowadays people are well-informed and skillful enough to solve their problems, or even, they can use the internet to analysis everything fast in order to save their time to solve their obstacles. I take the former viewpoint with a pinch of salt and claim that the latter viewpoint is much closer to the reality, for I do believe that the more people make their decision by themselves, the more they learn how to manage their time and issue to solve their problems without consuming a great deal of time and energy. As a result, until people solve their problems by themselves, they cannot understand the precious of time.
First of all, obviously, these companies are producing the basic and important goods for people. As a matter of fact, if these companies stop, people encounter with a lot of problems. To illustrate this fact, on needs only refer to result of this desicion which people buy their essential products with high cost because after stopping these product should import from other cities or even countries. Seldom does this decision bring people benefit. Althogh these companies damage the environment, what results from stoping them are to enhance the rate of unemployment among people beause most of people miss their jobs. The noteworthy intelligible results, which conducted in our country, show that the high percentage of people missing their job due to closing companies, are ones having a lot of problem in their live.
To wrap it up, considering all aforementioned reasons, on soon realizes that nowadays, people should solve their peoples based on their knowledge and information inasmuch as in the first place they will be independent and become a responsible one, and in the second place they learn how to solve their problem without spending more time by coping with their problems. What make me sure and hopeful is that that in the not too distant future people will make their important decision by themselves based on what they know about their lives, for whereby, they can make an outstanding contribution to their society improve, and as a proverb says "the biggest room in the world, is the room for improvement" I firmly believe that it is prominent for us to help our society's breakthrough.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
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Line 3, column 976, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ny difficulty to solve my problems. for this reasons, had they not allowed me to mak...
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Line 5, column 336, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this product' or 'these products'?
Suggestion: this product; these products
...s with high cost because after stopping these product should import from other cities or even...
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Line 5, column 588, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...ate of unemployment among people beause most of people miss their jobs. The noteworthy intelli...
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...their job due to closing companies, are ones having a lot of problem in their live. ...
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Line 5, column 789, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun problem seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of problems'.
Suggestion: a lot of problems
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: that
...blems. What make me sure and hopeful is that that in the not too distant future people wi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, apart from, as a matter of fact, as a result, first of all, to begin with, in the first place, in the second place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 102.0 43.0788530466 237% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 100.0 52.1666666667 192% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3646.0 1977.66487455 184% => OK
No of words: 743.0 407.700716846 182% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90713324361 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.22092198188 4.48103885553 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6988178782 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 317.0 212.727598566 149% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4266487214 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1130.4 618.680645161 183% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 14.0 4.94265232975 283% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 100.857919868 48.9658058833 206% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 145.84 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.72 20.6045352989 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.96 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222152349835 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0778279440336 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.059103930011 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156182179444 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0813506096605 0.0645574589148 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 11.7677419355 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.79 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 153.0 86.8835125448 176% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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