Do you agree or disagree? "The most important thing about a job is how much money you earn in that job."
Almost everybody want to have good salaried job and they should, finance is a prime factor for which we work. Handsome digit salary is required to pay our bill and secure our future. But monetary gain has not outweighed other emotional and personal benefits which are required along with it. Further in my essay I will be appending my elucidation on importance of other factors with receiving salary for an employee.
There are various job profile that provide high salary but not necessarily promise growth to the worker. In order to increase their bank balance, they sabotage their future prospect. Many companies has promotional graph designed with its criteria that helps you to gain promotion as well as increment but not necessarily offer you job responsibilities or profile that you would enjoy performing. To quote an instance – one of my husband’s engineer friend changed his job that gave him good position and package but unfortunately he find himself learning nothing in new job and concurred that good salary can be earned but not at the cost of limited career growth.
Secondly, it is equally imperative to be satisfied with your job as it is to earn attractive income. Job – satisfaction involve many factors such as work – environment, work – place, team support and other similar perks. By paying healthy amount to worker many companies demand their so much time that they do not get time to have their meals. Similarly you do not get better support team to take over your task and meet the target but you ought to accomplish it as you take good portion of companies’ money. My brother did not got leave to offer his prayer in my grandmother’s death ceremony despite pleading and promising to meet the goal in time.
Money can buy us food and fashion but definitely not capable to buy us success and happiness. Money is essential but not everything in life. Our motive to earn money is to make our life luxurious but not restricted.
Sentence: Almost everybody want to have good salaried job and they should, finance is a prime factor for which we work.
Description: The fragment everybody want to is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace want with verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Sentence: But monetary gain has not outweighed other emotional and personal benefits which are required along with it.
Description: 'it' refers to what?
There are various job profile that provide high salary
There are various job profiles that provide high salary
Many companies has promotional graph
Many companies have promotional graph
but unfortunately he find himself learning nothing
but unfortunately he finds himself learning nothing
Sentence: satisfaction involve many factors such as work ? environment, work ? place, team support and other similar perks.
Description: The fragment satisfaction involve many is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace involve with verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Sentence: My brother did not got leave to offer his prayer in my grandmother's death ceremony despite pleading and promising to meet the goal in time.
Description: A verb, past participle is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to got and leave
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 20 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 333 350
No. of Characters: 1584 1500
No. of Different Words: 196 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.272 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.757 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.576 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 107 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.812 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.275 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.688 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.3 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.53 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.11 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5