Do you agree or disagree with this statement:
For success in a future job, the ability to relate people is more important than studying hard in school.
Success in the future job is related to a number of factors. According to what major we have chosen and what kind of job we able to do, there are many different ability which should be considered. Personally, I believe that having good relationship is more important than studying hard to be a successful person in job. There are three main reason to show why I have this preference.
First and foremost, one of the crucially important factor that is asked about is public relation which shows the attitude of employee toward people or other colleagues. In fact, some times to relate well to people even is more important than being knowledgeable in a certain area. My personal experience is a good example in this issue. About three years ago I was applied for a job in a company that was marketing area. I was working hard and could progress sooner than I had expected. After six month, although I had lots of information about my job, the manager asked me to quit the job because I could not convince customers to buying more. So, I could not be a successful person in marketing area.
Another prominent reason is that, the first thing that in work place will be considered is workers' ability in effective relation with others. In other word, the very first thing that a person shows in job, is speaking and behaving with coworkers or boss. This ability will be affected the perception of others from both your characteristic and skills in job environment. For example, imagine a new accepted person in a company who has problem with one of coworker. If this person cannot solve the problem and find proper solution for that, the superior authority should interfere and solve the problem. This trend will affected the employer mind in negative way that he/ she cannot relate well.
Last but not least, studying hard in school or university just guaranty the higher mark but not many other skills that are necessary for working in future. Hence, trying to learn social relationship by taking part in public activities in universities and colleges has higher priority rather than getting good marks. As I mentioned before in the first example, I could not be a successful person in job, although I have had very high marks in university.
To sum up, regarding to the fact that the ability to relate well in job environment is the first thing that affects others, should be considered as more important than studying hard in school.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 147, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...at kind of job we able to do, there are many different ability which should be considered. Per...
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Line 3, column 498, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
...s sooner than I had expected. After six month, although I had lots of information abo...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...a successful person in marketing area. Another prominent reason is that, the fi...
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Line 5, column 620, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'affect'
Suggestion: affect
... and solve the problem. This trend will affected the employer mind in negative way that ...
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Line 7, column 146, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...r skills that are necessary for working in future. Hence, trying to learn social relation...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'regarding', 'so', 'well', 'for example', 'in fact', 'kind of', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.213362068966 0.229887763892 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.174568965517 0.158761421928 110% => OK
Adjectives: 0.10775862069 0.0866891130778 124% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0474137931034 0.046263068375 102% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0387931034483 0.0685040099705 57% => OK
Prepositions: 0.133620689655 0.118717715034 113% => OK
Participles: 0.0581896551724 0.0351676179071 165% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.60428476251 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0280172413793 0.0309702414327 90% => OK
Particles: 0.00215517241379 0.00188951952338 114% => OK
Determiners: 0.0797413793103 0.0887237588012 90% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0258620689655 0.0209618222197 123% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0215517241379 0.0139019557991 155% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2447.0 2387.08602151 103% => OK
No of words: 423.0 408.028673835 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.78486997636 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.338061465721 0.338922669872 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.231678486998 0.251872472559 92% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.167848699764 0.174417080927 96% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.101654846336 0.112833075102 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60428476251 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489361702128 0.524397521467 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 54.1400612757 59.2087087015 91% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6684587814 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.1428571429 20.5533526081 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4692431013 48.84282405 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.523809524 120.699889404 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1428571429 20.5533526081 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.52380952381 0.644075263715 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 43.3107058426 45.7405998639 95% => OK
Elegance: 1.55371900826 1.45489161554 107% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.480348188406 0.300154397459 160% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.101723392252 0.103427244359 98% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0640382557813 0.0752933317313 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.501458908017 0.497263757937 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.157590654291 0.151897553556 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.168903269735 0.114077575197 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0893877979224 0.0781384742642 114% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.321102222981 0.336927656856 95% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0199646897693 0.067059652881 30% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.316886106175 0.210909579961 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0400393297471 0.0618886996521 65% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.