Do you agree or disagree: young people should try many different kinds of jobs or career before they decide the long term career of their life.
From a broad perspective, in the current state affairs we face, in which so difficlut becomes life that rarely people do manage to scrap a living. Threfore, it is not far-teched to presume that finding a decent job is an ultimate goal for most of the people. Howver, which approach in young people leads them to achieve to that end is considered as a contentious issue. There is a growing segment of people who contend this idea that youths should not pass up their chance to give a try() for diverse kinds of occupations. I personally concur with this idea, and in the ensuing paragpraph, the rationale behind this statement will be further elaborated.
First and foremost, nature of modern jobs requires gaining sufficient knowledge. There is no denying to the fact that careers become varied in comparision to the past. Nowaday, modern societies attest() far more specific jobs. Take a common job such as accounting as an example. A person who are seeking a job, as a newly graduated from the university, encounter a side array of field in its major. Indeed, he can find a job as a accountant officer to management accountant and each of them need() particular knowledge and have enterly different career path. On the other hand, in the past, having entered in the specific career, graduated individuals took certain steps in order to promote. As a matter of fact, it made no difference what is their final destination since all the ways ended up with() a same point. Subsequently, if juvenils take this opportunity and gain experience in various field, they raise() the chance to find the job which have more compatible() with their interests as well as aims.
Another vital point which should be taken into consideration is that the more experience human gain, the more he become aware(). Needless to say that people, in this era of time, have an unlimited access to wide range of information thanks to various technological() development. Subsequenly, usually young people have rather adequate theoretical() knowledge. But the question arises here, whether this kind of information() can merely() guarantee their future accomplishment(S). According to the latest research attributing to Dr. Kevin Rude, a prominent and highly respected professor in the Department of Demography in the Macquarie University, the rate of contentment() of jobs has a substanail drop in the last 2 decades due to choosing the jobs based on unpractical information. This probe provide further legitimacy to demonstrate that work experience in varied jobs can secure individuals to pursue more proper career.
To wrap it up, it is more judicious to say that juvenils can benefit a lot by working in different jobs. This issue not only is paramount important in today's complicated jobs which getting more narrowed, but it also allows them to make more accurate and wise decision.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 426, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...its major. Indeed, he can find a job as a accountant officer to management accoun...
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Line 3, column 182, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'unlimited access'.
Suggestion: unlimited access
... that people, in this era of time, have an unlimited access to wide range of information thanks to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, well, kind of, such as, as a matter of fact, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2368.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 473.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00634249471 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87327377936 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583509513742 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 756.9 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7524579057 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.636363636 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.54545454545 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193653004483 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0512596523012 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0338482228809 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106662060369 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0432059144871 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 86.8835125448 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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