Do you agree or disagree: young people should try many different kinds of jobs or career before they decide the long term career of their life.
From a broad perspective, in the current state affairs we face, in which so difficult becomes life that rarely people do manage to scrap a living. Therefore, it is not far-fetched to presume that finding a decent job is an ultimate goal for most of the people. However, which approach in young people leads them to achieve to that end is considered as a contentious issue. There is a growing segment of people who contend this idea that youths should not pass up their chance to give diverse kinds of occupations a try. I personally concur with this idea, and in the ensuing paragraph, the rationale behind this statement will be further elaborated.
First and foremost, nature of modern jobs requires gaining sufficient knowledge. There is no denying the fact that careers become varied in comparison to the past. Nowadays, modern societies attest far more specific jobs. Take a common job such as accounting as an example. A person who are seeking a job, as a newly graduated from the university, encounter a side array of field in its major. Indeed, he can find a job as an accountant officer or a management accountant, in a way that each of them necessitates to acquire particular knowledge and create entirely different career path. On the other hand, in the past, having entered in the specific career, graduated individuals took certain steps in order to promote. As a matter of fact, it made no difference what is their final destination since all the ways ended up at the same point. Subsequently, if juveniles take this opportunity and gain experience in various fields, they will raise the chance to find the job which have more compatible with their interests as well as their aims.
Another vital point which should be taken into consideration is that the more experience human gain, the more he become conscious Needless to say that people, in this era of time, have an unlimited access to wide range of information thanks to various technological development. Subsequently, usually young people have rather adequate theoretical knowledge. But a question arises here, whether this kind of data can merely guarantee their future accomplishments. According to the latest research attributing to Dr. Kevin Rude, a prominent and highly respected professor in the Department of Demography at the Macquarie University, the rate of career contentment has a substantial drop in the last 2 decades due to choosing the jobs based on unpractical information. This probe provides further legitimacy to demonstrate that work experience in varied jobs can secure individuals to pursue a more proper career.
To wrap it up, it is more judicious to say that juveniles can benefit a lot by working in different jobs. This issue not only is paramount important in today's complicated jobs which getting more narrowed, but also allows them to make more accurate and wise decision.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 186, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'unlimited access'.
Suggestion: unlimited access
... that people, in this era of time, have an unlimited access to wide range of information thanks to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, therefore, well, kind of, such as, as a matter of fact, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2403.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02719665272 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90467366099 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 282.0 212.727598566 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589958158996 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 769.5 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.7289096013 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.428571429 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7619047619 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196434624475 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0539374494571 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0306566633066 0.0737576698707 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109203973903 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044502093965 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 86.8835125448 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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