Do you agree or disagree: young people should try many different kinds of jobs or career before they decide the long term career of their life.
Throughout the whole history, people have perennially been concerned about choosing the career or should I say, the different kinds thereof. A plethora of people hold the conviction that it is really important for the people to experience different kinds of jobs before they make up their mind to choose a long time career of their life. Others, on the other hand, take a radically different viewpoint and assert that they should only concentrate on one type of deed to do all their life long. In this writer’s view, it is of the utmost importance to have different kinds of jobs before starting a long term career and the lines below will shed more light on the issues that are put forward.
The first and most exquisite point which coming to the mind to substantiate my standpoint is concerned with the issue that hardly can anyone deny the fact that having more experience in different kinds of working environments, people can find a more decent job with a high salary in the near future. As an illustration, in our country Iran, if a person with biomedical sciences degree from the university has enough experience in working in different pharmaceutical companies as an R&D (research and development) expert, then as a QC (quality control) expert and after that as a QA (quality assurance) expert, he might find a decent job in the company as a manager of a department or the manager of the company. Thus, having a long time experience in just one part, that is to say for instance, as an R&D scientist, he might just find a work as an R&D expert in the entire life.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that people need diversity in their life especially when they are younger. As a case in point, take a person who experienced a wide variety of careers when he was young and a university student. When he grows older, he does not find his career boring anymore because he experienced diversity when he was younger and he can concentrate more on his present deed compared to other people and can be actually more efficient in the working area. Having some researches done, data yielded by the relevant statistics corroborate the notion that the people who have diversity in their career when they are young are more satisfied in their future life.
As a final point, it is really crucial for the college students before going to the university to have sufficient different career experience because it can help them to find their special talent and favourite career for the future. Therefore, they can choose their future major in the university with a wider horizon. Also, they will love their university major more than other inexperienced students because they know what they want to do and who they want to become in the future. They will try their best in their studies, catch the chances of working in the university and get more experience in their field of interest. For example, there are a lot of faculties who can introduce a distinguished student to a prestigious and well-known company.
In a nutshell, it is of little account to have a long term experience in just one career. It is important to have diversity in the deeds before choosing a long-term career for the life because it can help the person to find a more decent job in the future, be more satisfied in their future life and find their own talent and way of life.
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...out choosing the career or should I say, the different kinds thereof. A plethora ...
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...ferent career experience because it can help them to find their special talent and favourite care...
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... find their own talent and way of life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, if, really, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, on the other hand, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2780.0 1977.66487455 141% => OK
No of words: 590.0 407.700716846 145% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71186440678 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92848004997 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64298326302 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.413559322034 0.524837075471 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 888.3 618.680645161 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.6803556526 48.9658058833 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.444444444 100.406767564 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.7777777778 20.6045352989 159% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11111111111 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.349376196288 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132835777234 0.076458572812 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0858158097691 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223112655365 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124072273825 0.0645574589148 192% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 11.7677419355 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.63 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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