Do you agree or disagree: the young people should try many different kinds of jobs or career before they decide the long-term career of their life
In today's convoluted and competitive world, it becomes highly charged and widespread hot debate whether young people should try to learn a various array of jobs before they make a long-term job for the entire of their lives or not. Therefore, some people are the leading proponents of the claim that it is better for people to focus on one job before making a long-term decision for their lives. However, others take an opposite point of view and believe that they will be more prosperous if they experience various kind of job. For this reason, if I have to face these choices, I would choose the latter point. There are some reasons, the most outstanding of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
First of all, one of the compelling reasons lending credence to the stance taken above is that recognition of interest is a really important facet of a job, which their success can be easily guaranteed by finding their interests. To elaborate on, if they do not know about their interests, it is conceivable that the hours of working make them feel bored and exhausted. Hence, they are allowed to find their interests readily by becoming familiar with a wide array of a job, and then they can chase their dreams and fulfill their ambitions. An example will illustrate this viewpoint much better. When my brother wanted to choose his job, he experienced different types of job in a short period of time, after three years, he found that he should follow the piano because no type of job could attract him. Now he is a famous pianist in our country.
Apart from recognition interests, another equally convincing point that justifies my assertion is that we are living in a hectic life and people not only they should be adept in various fields, but also they should learn how to collaborate with others. Since they are supposed to attend the society in the near future, their future prosperous will be guaranteed by being experienced and colligative. Needless to say that they should interact with different people with various attitude, for this reason, having experience in various kind of work enables them to be well-prepared in order to become successful in their future. Besides, having these advantages enable them to changes their job easily and also make promoting in their job. Consequently, the more people have various experience, the more they can be successful, no one can foresee the future and having various experience enable them to have a better situation in the future.
TO wrap it up,, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that nowadays, knowing about much jobs and career make them people to have thriving future inasmuch as in the first place, they can find their interests easily, and in the second place, they will learn some basic and indispensable factors such as being experienced and collaborative which brings them several lucrative consequences. What make me sure and hopeful is that in the not too distant future people will choose several jobs to chase their dreams, for whereby, they can help their society improve, and as a proverb says "the biggest room in the world, is the room for improvement" I firmly believe that it is prominent for us to help our society's breakthrough
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, really, second, so, then, therefore, well, apart from, kind of, such as, first of all, in the first place, in the second place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2719.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 551.0 407.700716846 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93466424682 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84493438435 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67863185102 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484573502722 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 844.2 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.0453228205 48.9658058833 190% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.055555556 100.406767564 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.6111111111 20.6045352989 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3888888889 5.45110844103 191% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271339621276 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0860030327575 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0664272696985 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17027505693 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445160493716 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 11.7677419355 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.91 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 86.8835125448 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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