do you agree or disagree?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
It is undeniable that families are one of the importance in our lives which has caused heated debate over a long period of time. Their existence affects everybody in his daily lives. Depending on the personal experiences, personality type, and emotional concern, people differ greatly in their attitudes towards this issue. We find some people hold the idea that in the past the extended family were important than todays. On the contrary, others think differently. The second group believes that there is not any difference and they are as important as the past. From my point of view, I completely agree with the first group. There are countless reasons supporting my idea. In the following essay, I am in explaining some of the important ones.
The first reason pinpoints to the economic situation in today's society. Nowadays, the hard situation of the society forces people to work hardly. Most of the people have two jobs, but again with two time working they have troubles to provide all their needs. Take the taxi drivers, for instance. Their income is not suitable for four member's family; in some cases, the wife has to work, too.
Therefore, with a close look at this point, it will be clear that there is no time for them to meet their extended family.
In addition, in big cities, the far distance not only makes the people be far from each other, but also makes lives hardly. In Tehran, my city, nearly there is traffic jam every day; after work we have to drive in traffic streets and when you arrive home, you just want to rest. While it looks not important reason, but nowadays it contained as the main factor of family's separating. All your daily times spend in streets and your work, in some cases; you cannot find anything in our refrigerator because there is no time to shopping, too.
The last but not least, in today's society, friends are accumulated instead of the family. As you spend most of your daily time in your works, it is not unfamiliar that you become close them rather than your family. If you think this a little deeply, it will be common for you to see your friend more than your family members. In my own life, I can just my family twice yearly, while I am with my coworkers always in a same place. Furthermore, lets me to talk about the following point. As you know, today people go to the cities for working. Hence, some of them are so far from their family. For example, my brother lives in a town that is 36 hours distance with us. Surely, he cannot see us soon.
With a close look at what mentioned at above, we will understand the meaning of the statement. It is clear from me why nowadays extended families are so far from us? Why we couldn't see them as more as the past.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...ded families are so far from us? Why we couldnt see them as more as the past.
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Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...rom us? Why we couldnt see them as more as the past.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, look, second, so, therefore, while, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, in fact, you know, in some cases, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2237.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 490.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56530612245 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33342069609 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502040816327 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 702.9 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.6725127812 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.1612903226 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8064516129 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61290322581 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137756272498 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0347413275035 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480817142337 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0691300011114 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0483449427209 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 11.7677419355 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.93 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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