extended family
It is irrefutable that the family structure has undergone a significant change in modern society. From my perspective, in today’s world extended family does not play a critical role in people’s lives compared to the past. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will discuss further in the following essay.
To begin with, family members are more independent than the past. In earlier times, people cooperate with each other in order to meet their families’ basic needs such as food, housing, security, and so forth. For instance, extended families, especially in rural areas, share a household and run a family farm. Not only does this traditional family structure facilitate earning money, but also helps them to overcome crises by providing a support network. Nowadays more well-paid jobs are available and most of the people have a job which enables them to afford the necessities of life without the help from their family. Besides, immigrating to far cities make individuals to expand their social circle beyond their family members.
Furthermore, by advancement of technology more entertainments are available. Today people spend a lot of time watching television, going to cinema, and surfing the internet; therefore, not so much time is left for visiting their extended family’s members such as their grandparents, uncles, aunts, and so on. On the contrary, in former times amusements were restricted to extended family’s activities. For instance, when my grandparents were little, the only way to spend their free time was to play with their cousins.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that extended family is less important in modern life. This is because people live more independently now; also, various types of entertainments are accessible due to technology development.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, if, so, therefore, well, as to, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1534.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 284.0 407.700716846 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4014084507 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05491788905 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.619718309859 0.524837075471 118% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5975426625 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.266666667 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9333333333 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4 5.45110844103 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.349863606654 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133453163193 0.076458572812 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122192986319 0.0737576698707 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232037494334 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.027599712055 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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