It is axiomatic to say that we all need advice at one point or the other in life. However, the question regarding who to take advice from is highly controversial. Some people may hold the opinion that taking advice from peers is way better than that from older friends. Notwithstanding, there is an exponentially increasing segment of people who will maintain their stand that seeking advice from people who are older and more experienced is more advantageous. For me, I concur with the later group of people. The rationale behind my opinion will be elaborate in the trailing paragraphs.
The very first thing that came to my mind to defend my viewpoint is that older friends have gained more experience. To begin with, they have had more experience with peer group influence, jobs, admissions, marriage, you name it. But, your mates are people like you, in the sense that they may also be facing the same dilemma as well, and so, may not be able to provide any tangible advice. For example, some months ago, I had issues with my boss at work. I was in a fix - first, my boss was very harsh, I even thought her to be irrational, and second, I really wanted to quit that job, but I needed the money for my mom's medications or else, I would lose her. Then, I went to my peers who all opined that I resign, nonetheless, my neighbour, Mr Sam, advised that I stay on the job and gave me tips on how to feel relaxed while working with my employer. I applied these tips, and consequently, I not only remained in that job, I also established a smooth relationship with her, as well as received an increase in salary. But if I had adhered to the advice of my inexperienced peers, I probably would have become an orphan by now.
Furthermore, some peers could give misleading advice. I agree that some good friends could give me some invaluable advice, but those people are only found in my circle of close friends. Apart from these special people, my other peers will give me advice that could make me end up in jail, and are ever ready to laugh at my downfall. For instance, I was experiencing financial problems, thus, I went to my peers for advice. Guess what they told me? They said I should engage in pickpocketing. I initially commenced a career as an upcoming notorious thief, and was apprehended one day. After staying in jail for two days, I was bailed by that neighbour of mine, Mr Sam. Not only, did he bail me out, he also gave me the exact amount of money that I was trying to raise. Moreover, he advised me not to engage in such an act again. I mean, older friends are totally indispensable!
Finally, the advice of older friends are mostly geared towards helping me secure a better future. As an illustration, while a friend of comparable age will talk about a crush, secondary school days, and a quarrel with a parent, an older friend will talk about what university to go to, how to secure and keep a job, future life partners, how to be prepared for retirement, and so on. What I mean is this, conversation with older friends are far more profitable than those with friends within the same age bracket.
To sum up, I believe that, to a great extent, advice from older friends are more valuable when weighed against advice from peers because they are more experienced, give directive advice and lastly, converse about a better future. To this end, my older friends give better advice than my peers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, lastly, may, moreover, nonetheless, really, regarding, second, so, then, thus, well, while, apart from, for example, for instance, i mean, as well as, to begin with, to sum up, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 92.0 43.0788530466 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2799.0 1977.66487455 142% => OK
No of words: 614.0 407.700716846 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55863192182 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.977853291 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60304128172 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 310.0 212.727598566 146% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504885993485 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 888.3 618.680645161 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 29.0 9.59856630824 302% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.86738351254 536% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.3893038068 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5172413793 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1724137931 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.45110844103 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247219166653 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0659780642018 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0877690841692 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178571971953 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116954972615 0.0645574589148 181% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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