Imagine that you plan to donate money to charity to help people in need. If you could give money to
only one type of charitable organization, which one of the following would you choose and why?
- An organization that provides food and housing to people in need
- An organization that gives people money to start their own small business
- An organization that provides medical care to people in need
Throughout of history people have been interested in to assist other needy people like vagrants or hobos. Nowadays, there are a lot of various organizations that their task is helping people in need. Some of them provide food and house, some help people to commence a new business individually and others provide medical care. Certainly, some people if asked would agree with the statement that it is not important type of these charitable organizations, while others would mention the question depends on a great deal of factors; for example, somebody might be sensible about health of society therefore select third option. If I found myself to choose between the three of these choices, I would definitely go for second stance that through this option charitable organizations help vagrant people to begin their own small business. In what follows I will cogently pinpoint some conspicuous reasons to justify my point of view.
First of all, it is important to consider that through this way in most cases needful people are able to make money in their small business and with this money build or buy house and food and also spend for their medical care and insurance. To illustrate that idea let’s consider following example. I remember my neighbor, who was pauper. A couple of years ago when a charitable organization helped him to rent a place and buy an apparatus of welding, his life changed and he could rent a bigger house and took insurance for his family and other decent works that made him happy.
Another equally significant point to be mentioned is that this way enhances people’ self-esteem and self- confidence besides helps them out to be more energetic and active because they are dealing with their own job without any boss. By the way, performance of their career definitely is higher when they are proud of themselves. By way of example, I can recall the same neighbor in the previous paragraph that after a while I understood that his communication and behavior with other people altered and he was interested in say hello and speak about environmental events. Indeed, that was positive effects of his job.
In addition to what was mentioned above, people could develop their business and in the future hire some people, who live like their past. In fact, they could help the government to reduce unemployment and poverty rate. As a matter of fact, Poverty and unemployment are the main reasons of adverse and negative behaviors in societies. The results of a study conducted in my university indicate that people who had adverse situation in the past, are more reliable to help needy people and guide them for a good job and life.
By way of conclusion, based on the arguments explored above, I am of the opinion that charitable organization should invest on some ways by which people in need could start their own affairs. Not only helps them to gain money but also they could manage their money and develop their work with higher self- confidence. All aforementioned reasons point to my idea. However, a significant issue that must be mentioned is that this cannot be used as a prescription for everybody and some counterexamples might exist.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ding, his life changed and he could rent a bigger house and took insurance for hi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, third, while, for example, in addition, in fact, all the same, as a matter of fact, by the way, first of all, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2656.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 536.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9552238806 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70261582979 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511194029851 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 841.5 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.2628373297 48.9658058833 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.727272727 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3636363636 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.45454545455 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206132018346 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0600137648427 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496701119244 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121047590536 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0530422349373 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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