An important leader
Khomeini is one the important leaders in our country history. He created Islamic revolution and this led to a big change in our government structure. Some people believes that he is the most important leader in history; Others disagree. In my view, he has been a great leader for our nation for two important reasons.
The main reason is that he just focused on people's expectations and tried to achieve them. This feature of that dignitary led to gathering people. For example, I remember about one month ago was Islamic revolution ceremony, there was a speaker talking about Khomeini and his effects on people to prepare them for a big change. As the speaker said about forty years ago that Khomeini started this movement, the previous government was very cruel and killed people easily. All people were tired of that government and wanted a new one. In addition, people had some certain expectations and needs including better life, freedom, democracy and so on. Khomeini and his team, focused on these factors and tried to rearranged a liberal government, the one that majority of people desired that. As we can see, this man achieved his goals because they were based on people needs and also all people supported him.
The another reason is that he had some special characteristics. We can rarely find leader in our history who has these features. He was the most smart and brave leader in in our history. For instance, again in that ceremony and given lecture I knew this man more. The speaker said that the time that Khomeini wanted to begin this motion, he did not have any special support and there was no foreign country to support him to oppose with the previous government. As the speaker said, he was a brave man and relied solely on god and started his goals. He was a smart leader because he have found that if a leader wants to achieve some goals and arrange a government, has to pay attention to people's need first. This experience taught me that for achieving success in a group, we have to determine the common goals of all members.
In sum, some people may oppose this and thinks that there were many other important leaders in our history, I think Khomeini is the most important one. Not only had he just focused on people's expectations and tried to achieve them but also had special characteristics. We should consider all aspects when we want to determine a person as a most leader.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, as to, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, talking about, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1996.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72985781991 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52624862631 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.450236966825 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 627.3 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.1710896806 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.7826086957 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.347826087 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86956521739 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152471085655 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.060846178536 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.092967255998 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140089702927 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103930652545 0.0645574589148 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.04 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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