Increasingly, robots and computers are being used to do work that humans once had to do for themselves. Some people believe the effect of this change will be mostly positive and helpful for humans. Other people believe that robots and computers will take too many jobs away from humans who are currently paid to do them.
Which view do you agree with and why?
From a broad perspective, in today’s machinery world in which we live, where humans are the most important creatures in the world, it is not off the point for one to presume that human kind living can be very important to that end. However, utilizing the technology for having a better life is considered as a contentious issue among many. There is a growing number of people who contend that the effect of robots and computers being used to do work that humans once had to do for themselves will be mostly positive and helpful for them. While many others are of the point that robots and computers will take too many jobs away from humans who are currently paid to do them. I personally count myself among the former group. In what follows, I will attempt to elaborate on this thesis further.
The first reason coming to my mind is that should robots and computers do our current work, we can spend our time focusing on more vital jobs. In today’s era in which we live, the technology is having rapid progresses. Let us be optimistic about the fact. Nowadays we have a wide array of choices to mitigate our quality of lives. The story of world creature has a vital purpose of which the role of humans is the most important part. As a result we, as the owner of the world in which we live, have critical responsibilities in the long run. Regarding to what I mentioned, human kind must take best out of their time and have propulsion during their lives. If technology can help us make the world a better place for living, we should enhance our knowledge for using them in more appropriate ways and let them do our current work. As a result, we can have more time to do more valuable tasks. To exemplify, take a construction group who wants to make a building. Was there a robot having ability to do rudimentary jobs like carrying loads, the group would work on side effects of construction and trying to reduce its harmful side effects on the environment.
In addition, the technology can help us in many other cases that have direct influence on our daily livings. Here I want to clarify myself using an example. In science of traffic, nowadays we are taking advantages of the technology in more tangible ways. For instance, GPS has had a wonderful effect on our common lives. As it is generally agreed, it is much better to use GPS through our smart phones to get information about traffic on the roads. So that we can decide which road and street is the best way for our inside the city short trips which takes less time to transport. As a result of using this legitimate technology, there is no humanities fault for broadcasting the volume of the traffic and the information gained by this technology is the sharpest one among others relying on people investigations.
To wrap it up, the world in which we take advantages of robots and computers known as technology, we have more fruitful lives if we use them in logical ways. As I mentioned, nowadays we have more time for doing vital work, moreover, technology has less faults in comparison to humans as it is systematically controlled. There is a judicious prediction that we will have much better life in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'there are no humanities'?
Suggestion: there are no humanities
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Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun faults is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, while, for instance, in addition, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2620.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 569.0 407.700716846 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60456942004 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88402711743 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65125521627 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.444639718805 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 839.7 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.4617004652 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.037037037 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0740740741 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305220991511 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0849573567053 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115571529554 0.0737576698707 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217593243992 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126335567062 0.0645574589148 196% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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