It is better to travel abroad to visit different countries when you are younger rather than when you are older.
In the developing world, people steady are in motion. With kids, work and other community obligations, life can get hectic very quickly. Therefore, people need become less busy and decrease their stress. I believe that travel is one of the productive ways, which enable people to drift apart of busy life. Contrary to established beliefs that it is better to travel and visit various countries when you are old, I am of the opinion that you should go a trip when you are young. Having more energy for tour and necessities of the travel for youth in term of enhancing experiences and feeling relaxed to go on are the main reasons why I hold this point of view.
The first point worth mentioning would be that without a shadow of the doubt when you are young you have more ability to go trip and enjoy your time. In addition, you are more curious and adventurous which is excited you to force with travel’s difficulties and take on them. On the other hand, young people are usually venture compare with old people and this feature drive them to be more active and experience many things. As a result, their journey will be full of amazing and exciting events, which make beautiful memories for them. A prime example from my own experience may shed some light on this point. Last year, my family and I went a trip to the turkey country in the winter. My brother and I enjoyed our times and went the skiing but my parents could not come skiing because of their age and stayed at the hotel but we knew there were unknown because of their mountains and ski. They lost enjoy of skiing while, my brother and I used our time beneficially.
There is also a more subtle point we must consider. Travel for young people is necessary. Youth can increase their experiences and expand their horizons by traveling. This is because, they will encounter different problems during the trip beside, they will learn to manage their time and money. Consequently, all of these skills will able them to tackle the problems in their life. Furthermore, young people need to refresh their mind continually after longtime work and I believe that travel can help them to gather their thoughts and reinforce their power. For instance, I have gone travel every year and it helps me to learn how I can solve my problems during the trip by myself and besides this, I spent my time alone and it has enabled me to reflect on some things and earn extra energy to go on.
All in all, if all the reasons contemplated we can reach this conclusion that travel for young people not only is more necessary in comparison with old people but also is raised their experiences, self-confidence and ability to continue their life.
Comments
Traveling when you are young…
Traveling when you are young can be especially exciting. At this age, you have a lot of energy and flexibility, which allows you to explore new places, try extreme activities and travel on a budget. You can also easily make new friendships and discover new cultures.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 287, Rule ID: APART_A_PART[2]
Message: Wrong collocation. Did you mean 'apart from'?
Suggestion: apart from
...tive ways, which enable people to drift apart of busy life. Contrary to established beli...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, may, so, therefore, while, for instance, in addition, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 13.8261648746 210% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2221.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64644351464 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44133654429 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504184100418 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 688.5 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.1206947222 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.954545455 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7272727273 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45454545455 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151691368121 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0479828701238 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102416562548 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101167651846 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0866038613354 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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