it is easier to family member to become successful in their lives than the past
family plays a significant role their children's success. while some people say it is much easier to become successful without family members help then the past, I do believe that it is much more difficult to become successful than the past. I find this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the job market is increasingly becoming competitive. In fact, job opportunities are much more knowledge-based than the past. Hence, people need to be supported by their family members especially their parents. In addition, due to the high cost of education, most children can not afford to continue their study to achieve a higher qualification. An example will illustrate this viewpoint much better. When I was an undergraduate student, I decided to continue my study at a university abroad. Since I could not afford to pay my tuition, my father told me that he would support me financially. For this reason, had my father not supported me, I would not have applied for that university. As a result, I strongly believe that people are able to count on their family members in order to pay their way.
Secondly, technology has provided an opportunity for people to keep in touch with each other all over the world by getting online. Nowadays, family members are able to chat with each other whenever they want, but they were not able to speak with each other when they are living in different part of the world. Therefore, they can share their emotion, and help each other when they are in a difficult situation. For example. when I was an undergraduate student, I had a part-time job at university campus magazine as a reporter. As I remember, one time, I interviewed professor Nejati, who is a well-known psychologist in my country, about the emotional effects of technology on the students' performance. He told me that, nowadays, technology allows students to chat with their family members if they feel loneliness. Also, he told me that a high percentage of students easily missed their education due to being away from their family members, but now they are able to count on them when they feel loneliness. Accordingly, nowadays, family members are able to help each other even they live far from each other.
In conclusion, no one can deny the enormous positive effects of family members role in the success of people. Not only are they able to support them financially, but also due to the progression of technology the can help them emotionally.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, hence, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2082.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88732394366 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84396622462 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478873239437 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 661.5 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3979257821 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.6363636364 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3636363636 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.40909090909 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322841912153 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.089027099683 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110646014215 0.0737576698707 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217697279949 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.134774887796 0.0645574589148 209% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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