It is important to improve our skills and knowledge as much as possible. Some people prefer to learn from individuals who have more experience than they do – like teachers and supervisors – instead of learning from peers, like their colleagues and classmates. Do you think this is a good idea? Why or why not?
Developing skills and receiving knowledge in the modern days are essential for everyone who craves for opportunities. Some people state that is super important to improve their skills doing it with those who have more knowledge than they, for instance, as supervisors or professors. However, others believe otherwise. The latter think that it is crucial to do so with classmates or co-workers. In my opinion, we should develop our skills and obtain knowledge from those who are one step ahead from us. I feel this way as I will explain in this article.
First of all, our supervisors have far way more experience than us at work because they went through different situation and lived it before we did it. For example, my supervisor had been visiting many different countries and going through experiences before me, then he knows more than my colleagues and I. Besides, he knows the details of each ones workers and is capable of helping out who needs him. Therefore, this example elucidates the desideratum of asking the supervisors' help when needed.
Moreover, professors have studied about the material deeply and is able to teach easily and get rid of the students' inquiries by leaps and bounds. For instance, students may cope up with different doubts about the subject and the professor is prompt to clarify what has been in question so far. What is more, professors are well trained to teach, some have master degree and many of them are entitle with Phd, what makes them highly trained for the profession. Thus, these instances explain the necessity of receiving knowledge from professors.
Finally, I strongly believe that it is much better to develop skills and gain knowledge from supervisors and professors because they are trained for the profession and are one step ahead from colleagues and classmates.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 471, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
... skills and obtain knowledge from those who are one step ahead from us. I feel this way...
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Line 2, column 197, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...xample, my supervisor had been visiting many different countries and going through experiences...
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Line 3, column 392, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'entitled'.
Suggestion: entitled
...have master degree and many of them are entitle with Phd, what makes them highly traine...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, i feel, first of all, in my opinion, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1520.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 302.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03311258278 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67187151951 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566225165563 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 466.2 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8364807327 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.333333333 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1333333333 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8 5.45110844103 198% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28215994698 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0867720227204 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0936431709225 0.0737576698707 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170966191144 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.087146786027 0.0645574589148 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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