Many people believe that it is important to make large amounts of money, while others are satisfied to earn a comfortable living. Analyze each viewpoint and take a stand. Give specific reasons for your position.
There are some topics that trail us to the ambiguity and this is one of them. Money which is the key point of some issues, however simultaneously it can not be the solution for some problems. Sometimes I think that without money life could be easy, may be you will be happy, but other times I think without any money no one can afford their life better. I have tried to examine points and state why I am the person who ants money.
First of all, the word ‘happy’ only consist of 5 words but you can’t imagine how much meanings are lay under it. To be happy, sometimes you need only to hear some words such as ‘my dear’, ‘I love you’, ‘I’m very lucky that I have a person like you in my life’ and etc. To know that someone is there for you make you feel confident or yourself happy. Saying these words don't cost any money. However, you can not say that I am happy if you go to clean roads every day at 5:00 or 6:00 AM till the 8:00 PM. Even someone says ‘I love you’ every day, believe me, you will not hear this saying because you will be busy with making your small hut warm, or you will be busy with buying a food, either buying an attire for your children with only $60 or $80. We can say that they can live but they are not happy with that money and they can not even afford their needs.
Other hand, there are some people who prefer and satisfied to have money for comfortable life. I think these people prefer this because they don’t like to work over time and they like to relax. However, they don’t think to work hard for several periods and then relax as they want. Imagine that you are traveling every month different country different cities, you can take delight. Nevertheless, earning money for a year then travel only 1 city in a year would be boring. Of course, we have to thank that we can afford it but it is not much enjoyable as traveling whole world.
In conclusion, working hard and earning money as much as possible could make the world more flourishing, easy and enjoyable. That is why I would prefer too much money as I can.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 250, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: maybe
... that without money life could be easy, may be you will be happy, but other times I th...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...te why I am the person who ants money. First of all, the word 'happy'...
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Line 2, column 99, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... 5 words but you can't imagine how much meanings are lay under it. To be happy,...
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Line 2, column 312, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...have a person like you in my life' and etc. To know that someone is there for you m...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...t or yourself happy. Saying these words dont cost any money. However, you can not sa...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... they can not even afford their needs. Other hand, there are some people who pr...
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Suggestion:
...h enjoyable as traveling whole world. In conclusion, working hard and earning ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, then, even so, i think, in conclusion, of course, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1727.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.39440203562 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32149775466 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493638676845 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 534.6 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1573660685 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.8947368421 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6842105263 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26315789474 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102176657979 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0431923417958 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0488277394098 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0785021217112 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0284201243886 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 10.9000537634 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.76 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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