Most advertisers make products seem much better than they really are.
With the genesis of modern technology, advertisements play a pivotal role in familiarity of general public with the products of companies all over the world. Now, the question is how much an advertisements show the reality of the products. Some people opine that advertisements are accurate description of the products. It is incredible that such an attitude exists in this day and age. As far as I am concern, I have a penchant for the opinion that in advertisements all features of products, approximately most of which are not positive, present. This view holds true in many reasons, most significant of which will be aptly fleshed out in the following paragraphs.
The first and foremost reason is the number of companies, which produce products around the world, have increased with high rate over time; therefore, consumers face a great diversity of brands to buy such products as food, clothes, and car. Hence, there are heavy competition among companies to consolidate their hold on the market. Companies are trend toward publishing advertisements which persuade people to purchase their products at the expense of deceiving consumers. For example, in an interview with managers of several companies which produce different types of a same good, all of whom claimed that they present best quality; on the contrary, some of their products turned out harmful for health.
The other thing that strikes me is that not only have the number of companies increased, but also companies use ambiguous phrases in their advertisements. As a matter of fact, they obliterate negative aspects of their products such as how much they are durable, how quality and efficiency of their products is, or what effects they have on human body to raise their sales. As an illustration of this, consider the following example. In an advertisement on TV a car company informed viewers only about advantage of its product, and they mentioned several times “you can drive with this car in high speed”, but they didn’t provide any information concerning its remarkable defects such as high fuel consumption. In fact, companies tend to exaggerate the high qualities of their products or to eliminate low qualities of them.
To sum up, it is my personal conviction that nowadays we have to be more careful about advertisements due to the fact that there exists high competition among companies to achieve maximum profit; furthermore, they inform people inaccurately about their products. Paying great attention to the experiences of other consumers can be of great help for many of us to have a good choice.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: public
...s play a pivotal role in familiarity of general public with the products of companies all over...
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Suggestion: an advertisement; advertisements
...he world. Now, the question is how much an advertisements show the reality of the products. Some ...
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...products turned out harmful for health. The other thing that strikes me is that ...
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... or to eliminate low qualities of them. To sum up, it is my personal conviction ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, so, therefore, for example, in fact, such as, as a matter of fact, on the contrary, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2184.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15094339623 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98625887676 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52358490566 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 685.8 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.3447270436 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.470588235 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9411764706 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94117647059 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166848544552 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0543332894179 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0444906228284 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103729748349 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0393182347121 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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