In order to be successful, a person must be open to new ideas and willing to change his or her mind.
The answer to the question that how to be successful can be varied from person to person. In my opinion, having new ideas and changing mind can raise people chance in order to be prosperous. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin with, new ideas are really a positive challenging to people's mind. In fact, it encourages people to try more and more to reach their goals. people need to have different ideas based on their current circumstances, and then, follow their new ideas to get success. An example will illustrate this viewpoint much better. I am living in Iran, where the unemployment rate is so high, and you can not see the progression of technology. Subsequently, I decided to apply for a high-ranked university of abroad, and stay there after graduation. Since I will graduate from a prestigious university that most of the companies will hire me. As a result of this changing attitude, I will have a decent job and life in my future. For this reason, if people change their mind positively, and try for their ideas, they certainly will be successful.
Second, nowadays, due to the progression of technology, people want more facilities in order to experience better and high standard of living. In fact, having new ideas in order to meet people's need can provide an opportunity for them to put their ideas into practice. Within this mind, there is a famous proverb in Persian which says " money is in people's need". Take an example to clarify this proverb better. I am living in Tehran, where is an overcrowded city of Iran, some students of Tehran University had an idea is named Snap, which enables people to find which highways are more crowded and which route is the best to get their destination in time. Since most people living in Tehran are suffering from traffic congestion, are buying this application to install on their phone. As a result, the students having this new idea are earning a hoard of money. Thus, if you recognize people's need, you can be successful by performing your new idea.
In conclusion, no one can deny the enormous positive effects of having new idea on people's lives. Not only does it enable them to try more and more, but also they can recognize the current need and become successful.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, second, so, then, thus, as to, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1913.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77057356608 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66730117471 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498753117207 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6461217624 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.9545454545 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2272727273 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.77272727273 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249514316265 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0824430504872 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0839649290316 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187813485301 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10694801018 0.0645574589148 166% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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