Question: When people move to another country, some of them decide to follow the customs of the new country. Others prefer to keep their own customs. Which one do you prefer? Support your answer with specific details.
There is a debate about whether it is better to follow the customs of the country that you have entered it or it is better to keep doing your own routines. In my opinion, getting similar to the people of the country sounds nicer. I think this way because of two reasons. First, it offers the opportunity to experience a variety of customs. Second, you may seem more approachable from the point the point of view of the people who live there.
To begin with, at the end of the day, although you can keep your own customs as the main lifestyle for yourself, you tried many cultures and imitated them in rituals. You can know more about the mindset of different individuals if you do the same thing they do at some point in your life. My father, as an example, had a travel to India when he was younger. He explains how he attended a religious ceremony in there and acted like them. It seems interesting to have some experiences like this in your lifetime.
Moreover, acting just like the people of the country that you traveled to it, can lead them to find you an approachable guy and interact with you in a more friendly way, compare to the circumstances that you don't show any interest to their culture. My husband's memory is a proof of that. He told me that once he went to a conference in Mexico city as a keynote speaker. For the first word, he said a greeting in their own language, which is Spanish. He surprisingly saw the effect of such friendly beginning in the manner of the audience. They smiled and kept listening for the whole time of the talk.
In conclusion, I prefer to act correspondent to the new culture when I go to another country rather than keeping my own routines in order to gain a sensation of what they do and think. Additionally, following their rituals, helps me to have more in common with them. therefore makes me sound more friendly in their mind.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1542.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 346.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.45664739884 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55029923643 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540462427746 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8551567023 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.1578947368 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2105263158 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31578947368 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252604798441 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.064130507858 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604232923529 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155894568229 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0361777664705 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.59 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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