Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?
Parents are the imitate for their children. There are many ways by that parents can give rewards to their children. However, sometimes these rewards deceived the children from their aim and they just read or study to get rewards. Once parent stopped these, they will not pay concentration toward studies. Some peoples agree that parent should reward their children either this would be money or something else, others would disagree. According to my perspective, parents always encourage and motivate their children by giving them rewards either it will money or any other thing.
First, it appreciates the children. when a child gets top marks, he or she may hope that their parents will give some reward so it is a way to motivate and encourage children. This will help them to success in future and will get a secure job in future. For instance, When I was at Loyola High School in Chicago, I got the highest score on the math section and there was tough competition among many students. When my parents came to my graduation, the owner of Faculty of math announced that achievement. It makes my parents so proud and when we return back to home. My parents gave me a surprise gift which was some money so that I could buy whatever I want. This is how parents can encourage their children by giving some reward so that they learn more and make their future bright.
Furthermore, competition among students increasing day by day. So, parents should offer some reward so that they can learn more and give them instruction to use your money in a proper way. They can use that money in buying some books, and other many stationary stuffs. By that way, children where and how to spend money and they will not waste it.
To sum it up, parents should reward their children also encourage and motivate them so, that will achieve their desired goals. Although children may mislead their rewards and waste it. But the pros of giving the reward to children is more than the cons of it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
Parents are the imitate for their children. There are many ways...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: When
...g. First, it appreciates the children. when a child gets top marks, he or she may h...
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Line 2, column 243, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ess in future and will get a secure job in future. For instance, When I was at Loyola Hig...
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Line 2, column 547, Rule ID: RETURN_BACK[1]
Message: Use simply 'return'.
Suggestion: return
...t makes my parents so proud and when we return back to home. My parents gave me a surprise ...
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Line 3, column 172, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a proper way" with adverb for "proper"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...give them instruction to use your money in a proper way. They can use that money in buying some...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, as to, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1634.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69540229885 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33824718983 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479885057471 0.524837075471 91% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.0839300216 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.8095238095 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5714285714 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42857142857 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280663683331 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0998536792019 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556219947214 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183319667787 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0507096551716 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.43 8.01818996416 80% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 86.8835125448 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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