Some parents forbid young children from owning smartphones (cell phones with Internet
access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in
touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
Nowadays, smartphones are very popular between people due to to its low prices and the fact that it make individuals lives easier. Some parent prefer prefer to prohibit their children from using smart phones, while other allow their children to own smartphones. In my opinion, Parents should allow their children to have access to smartphones. I fell this way for two reasons, which I will explore in this article.
To begin with, smartphones provide a wide range of means for learning, which can lead to improve the intellectual abilities of young people. Moreover, using smartphone person can access the internet instantly and search for any information that he search for. Not only that, but also get access to updated knowledge about different discipline and subjects. Not to forget to mention, There are many free apps help children learning different subjects using interactive way. Such as , apps that teach children math through a game and puzzles. My experience with my young brother is a good example of this. He understood the multiplication of numbers by watching videos on Youtbe using his smartphone. For that, I think that smartphones are providing young people with good resources for learning.
secondly, smartphones are a way to entertain out children , which help us to focus with other duties and responsibilities. Moreover, there are a lot of free games and apps that are suitable for children. So, rather than you have to spend time telling them stories or taking them to public playgrounds, you can just give them a smartphone to fulfill all their time. As a result you can focus on your real work than you have to complete. For instance, As a father for two children. I am doing a PHD, and I use smartphones to entertain my babies and be able to study and complete my researches. I can not imagine how my life was going to be without this tool, smartphone.
In conclusion, I think that parent should permit their children to own smartphones . This is because it provides a wide range of resources for learning, and because it is good for entertain young people and provide parents with time they need to do other stuffs.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1785.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90384615385 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77306563442 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532967032967 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.3599213689 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.0 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.7619047619 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27089431433 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.080187356153 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0593953320687 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178014175481 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337829885512 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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