Some people believe that the best way of learning about life is by listening to the advice of family and friends. Other people believe that the best way of learning about life is through personal experience. Compare the advantages of these two different ways of learning about life. Which do you think is preferable? Use specific examples to support your preference.
When it comes to the issue the best approach of learning about life, some people believe that the use of others’ advice lets us to have a better life. However, others have the opposite view. As far as I am concerned, the former point carries more weight. I take this position on account for the following reasons.
First and the most important reason is that consultation helps us to make fewer mistakes. As we all know, to decide correctly we need to have enough knowledge on the topic, while we can not know about many fields. Hence Family can assists us to become familiar with several aspects of any issue, which lead us to make mistakes. I think that a small example can give some light to this matter. When I wanted two expand my restaurants, my father’s experience assisted me to do this correctly, because he had a restaurant twenty years ago and was familiar with unforeseen problems, which I might meet them.
A further point we must consider is that the use of others’ tips save our times and money. Indeed, making experience is costly and time-consuming. Hence it is quite normal that the use of others experience eliminates the hustle of spending time and energy to achieve them. I think that there is not a better instance than myself when I was studying in the university. At that time, I want to apply for a university in the United States, while I never travel to out of my country. My brother who lived in this county gave me plenty of tips such as how to find a job, contact with American people, and continue my education in this country. His advises allowed me to easy adopt with new environment and being independent as quickly as possible.
Apart from points I made above, you can gain more knowledge by using others advice. In fact, it is possible that you do not need others’ advice, but listen to them lead you to acquire priceless knowledge, which can improve your attitude about the real life.
All above evidence supports this undeniable fact that consultation decreases our mistake, save our time and money. Of course, as an English proverb goes “a coin has two sides”; therefore, those who take the opposite view are partly reasonable that it some tips may be biased. Nevertheless, I strongly believe that its profits outweigh dangerous. Last but not least, I hope that schools pay more attention to learn students listen to adults’ advice.
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Suggestion: Hence,
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'nevertheless', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'apart from', 'i think', 'in fact', 'of course', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.20987654321 0.229887763892 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.166666666667 0.158761421928 105% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0802469135802 0.0866891130778 93% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0432098765432 0.046263068375 93% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0946502057613 0.0685040099705 138% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.102880658436 0.118717715034 87% => OK
Participles: 0.0144032921811 0.0351676179071 41% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.67212457893 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.037037037037 0.0309702414327 120% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0781893004115 0.0887237588012 88% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0164609053498 0.0209618222197 79% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0185185185185 0.0139019557991 133% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2417.0 2387.08602151 101% => OK
No of words: 418.0 408.028673835 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.78229665072 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.327751196172 0.338922669872 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.241626794258 0.251872472559 96% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.16028708134 0.174417080927 92% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0980861244019 0.112833075102 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67212457893 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578947368421 0.524397521467 110% => OK
Word variations: 69.6239599815 59.2087087015 118% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6684587814 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.5533526081 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.9073263338 48.84282405 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.863636364 120.699889404 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.5533526081 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.681818181818 0.644075263715 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 43.1626794258 45.7405998639 94% => OK
Elegance: 1.07432432432 1.45489161554 74% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.408199263239 0.300154397459 136% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0821864617227 0.103427244359 79% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0697328803812 0.0752933317313 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.470947972041 0.497263757937 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.128709373885 0.151897553556 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126713676291 0.114077575197 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111918601217 0.0781384742642 143% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.219928906328 0.336927656856 65% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0626636986594 0.067059652881 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244696373639 0.210909579961 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109628401892 0.0618886996521 177% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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